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Another great entry in this highly engaging read! I am so glad you are not following the overused trope of "the main girl falls in love with the main guy ( who is a dangerous man) and eventually he falls in love with her too" that I have seen in far too many stories ( they made have had different settings and back grounds but still was centered around that same, over used theme). I like Isabella's conflicted character! Her character is full of flaws and realistic, which is amaze-balls! She's 16, there fore she is very impressionable - so of course she would have "gaga" feelings of desire and crush- like feelings towards the man who is a "bad boy" ( cause what 16 yr old girl can resist a bad boy, especially an older one with experience at that) and who took her virginity. I think that immature side of her stays true to her age. But I also love how that side of her's is waring with her sensible side ( which is growing from her growing older and experiencing realty more and more). And I love how her sensible side won in the end of this chapter. She finally realized that there is no love between Anthony and her, and there never will be. I love how you included this epiphany alongside her finally admitting vocally how she hates the familia! The endof this chapter is a great set up for significant growth in character for Isabella from thinking as a teen to thinking as a young woman. I hope this leads her out of the "gaga" stage over Anthony (whom she really should hate over the fact that he did rape her) and into a new stage where through accepting that there is no love lost between her and Anthony, and also between her and her family - we will begin to see her thoughts go from just teenage rebelling to truly wanting and devising ways to get her freedom. I would also like to see her go from being an intimidated girl who only sometimes talks back to a young woman who has steel running through her blood and who will stand her ground with Anthony and with her familia ( after all she is a mafia princess). I want to see her start calling the shots sometimes and transform into a strong woman who strives to gain her independence and freedom from the familia and Anthony. Heck, if you could, it would be awesome to see her somehow escape from the familia for a few years and return to them a fiercely independent woman ( like her aunt in a way) and see where it goes from there. Or have her marry the bastard for awhile and secretly plot her escape/ revenge methodically. Or during her marriage to the buttwad, she could have an affair with a man whom she loves and loves her back and they both try to find a way to escape together only for it to end in both their deaths....I dunno, there are so many non traditional possibilities you can write for this story! Alas, these are just my two cents for I know as the author, you have the final say in what happens - which is A-Okay with me because you are doing a spectacular job! I just love that you aren't afraid to put your character through the wringer at times, which makes for great characterization and development! I'm so excited about where this story is leading to! Thank you for writing this engaging and entertaining story! I'm a fan!

I think a side story on sophia and her husband to be along with one on Armando and his wife would be awesome! Also, I'm very curious about Adonis's character and his main role in all of this!

I honestly can't see how she already loves him after two dates, I'd rather her get a back bone than act like a horny teenage girl.

If i were her, I'd probably run away. Fuck it, I'd rather live freely even for a short while than stay in that situation. Loving the story, can't wait to read the next chapter!!

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oh thtats an interesting twist you've got there. So I take it Viktor is trying to get the russians and romeros play along since sophia and isabella are quite close? You have build up nicely the characters so far, especially now since Annalisas backstory is revealed. I would bet that anthony will make an entrance on the opening of the hotel, right? so maybe isabella have to deal with that a bit more then she had in the last chapter, which was a bit dissapointing but well...you build the characters so its excusable ;) I can really see the plot when anthony finally realised that sophia is married to the russian mob and bel' und soph trying to avoid a blood bath or something. Frankly I dont think so that he will just leave Bel' be, since he kinda seems like the obsessive kind of man. Almost like her brother but maybe a bit more ruthless? Anyway...I enjoy your story so far! Hope your next update will be a long chapter without waiting that much for it :D Im an impatient one if I like a story ;) Cheers Jen

Wow this is intense! I love it! Was not expecting the sex scene. God that man is cold as ice. I want to punch him in his perfect mob face. Keep writing and I promise I'll wander over from the Harry Potter forum and review :)

You hit it out the ballpark. I can't wait to see how Isabella deals with her conflicting emotions about Anthony raping her and she enjoying it. Will she become pregnant, how will that be dealt with (oh the possibilities), will she act out more??? I can't wait to read the next installment.

I like the twists, and the changes that are happening as she grows up. At first I was concerned this was going get sexual when she's 14 and still very much a child. That's not my cup of tea. I look forward to the next chapter!

Wooooooah. Didn't see that coming at ALL. Wow, ok, I can't wait for the next chapter, as usual.