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January 23, 2016 at 12:00 AM
I think your story is very interesting so early in the beginning of it. But you must try to add personality to your characters. Through the whole first chapters ive got no idea what the three main characters want, who are they, what are their personalities like. What is the nature of the relatinship between the three if them, i understand that they are lovers but... why? What do they feel about each other? They didnt express their love and there was not even a single description about their feelings.