rate_review Reviews

This story has an interesting premise. I look forward to seeing where it goes.

Just wanted to mention that in the paragraph under the 2nd asterisk '*', the last sentence is incomplete and seems to be missing several words. It's the 'I’m lying on my stomach writing this, it distracts me from the pain a bit and ' sentence. Not sure what was supposed to come after 'and'. ?? Look forward to the next chapter!

I'm anxiously wondering if Malcolm can convince Clem that Jake is bad and Clem needs to escape with him. Your setting is very original and I love the characters, especially Clem. Thanks for the quick update.

Great start! Can't wait to read more! =)

You've created a wonderful, innocent character in Clem. I hope we don't have to wait too long for Malcolm to rescue him.