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for Harvey's Training

by curtainsup

person pip
schedule December 16, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Oh, wow... I am loving this so far! I adore your narrative voice and unobtrusive description of Harvey as it just slips right in there without throwing the reader out of the story. Your skill in allowing the reader to 'see' what is going on as well as feel it is wonderful.

The theme of unwilling pleasure is hard to write well because it's a very fine edge IMHO, but you are doing it magnificently here. Your content warnings read more like delightful promises. I can't wait to see you take this further, and if there is torture in this, I'll be very interested to see how you write it.

Excellent! Thank you for sharing your work.

Just to let you know you have a type in chapter 2: "...kind of porn he sort out..." should be "sought"

I'd be so grateful if you send me a message on the AFF forums when you update. I am Dafdes there.

Thanks,

Dafdes
person Lavi1443
schedule November 30, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Damn
I ave no idea how you can come up with those scenes
schedule November 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
So twisted! So good! Keep it up!

Xoxo
schedule November 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Finish this story please!!!!! It's so hot!
person Lavi1443
schedule November 19, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Its hot in a really disturbing way
person Anon
schedule November 17, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Just curious as to whether you will ever continue Prison Bitch or is it discontinued?