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September 13, 2015 at 12:00 AM
i wonder what the BIG secret is about....honestly I was intrigued by the first two chappies when he kept saying: DOn't hurt me, don't touch me.
But now it's getting kinda messy. Two new chara's out of the blue. Hope you have a your storyline clear in the head. Or else this is going to look like Walking dead tv show. Adding another new character, another drama, another boredom...dragging it till the end.
I loved the first three chapters, I want you to write this to the end. I enjoy reading it. BUT, I didn't like the last two chapters.
I hope next two change my mind:D
But now it's getting kinda messy. Two new chara's out of the blue. Hope you have a your storyline clear in the head. Or else this is going to look like Walking dead tv show. Adding another new character, another drama, another boredom...dragging it till the end.
I loved the first three chapters, I want you to write this to the end. I enjoy reading it. BUT, I didn't like the last two chapters.
I hope next two change my mind:D
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September 13, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I disagree with the last reviewer, I think adding the new characters does spice things up a bit and hurry things along. Without Clare and Mark, Jasper might have never gotten to get closer to whatever it is that Reuben is hiding. Reuben and Jasper are literally at a standstill, with neither one being able to make the next ove into furthering their relationship with one another without it being painfully and damaging to uneasy balance that they have now. These two new characters might just be able to help them get past that hurdle, so I'm really intrigued about what's going to happen next. Will Reuben be coxed by all three to finally confront his past? Or will be become jealous enough of Marks antics to finally confine in Jasper about how he really feels? I'm looking forward to more :3
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September 12, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Really great story. I can't wait to see what secret Reuben is hiding. Interesting twist with Clare and her brother
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September 11, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This is really original and interesting :) I'm really glad I got to read this! And I'm also very excited to see that you update this piece often because I can't wait to see how their relationship forms. Your writing is also very addicting, I could imagine every scene and my heart pounded at the proper moments. Looking forward to more!
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September 3, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I really love your Story! Great begining! Can't wait for more :)
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September 1, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I'm hooked :) can't wait to read more.
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August 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This seems like it's gonna be a great story! I wonder if Reuben was raped at some point and that's why he's afraid. How old is Jasper? Can't wait to read more!