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I love the story so much! Please keep writing! 

Thank you for updating :) Left at edge of my seat thinking about what might happen if they go through with the escape. You've made very complex and interesting characters, all with interesting character development.

Oh man shits getting deep! I have mixed feelings about Aren. I mean I know hes an asshole but I bet the sex is amazing. Anywho I hope they make it okay but that seems too good to be true!

You want to kill aren? Do u really want to kill the only interesting character in your story?! Ok, that's it for me. I won't read the rest. I can't accept Seral as main character. Youre a really good author but you failed at making him lovely!

Thank you for the update <3 It's been long.
I liked the new chapter, and I'm very curious to see how things will start happening around Tal.

Good to have you back. The next time you fall off the grid for more than a month, I'll spam your tumblr three times harder than before.
No pressure. ✌(｡◕_◕｡)✌

Thank you for the update! It was a very interesting chapter <3
Aren is so... weird :o

Its a bit comical actually. Seral and Aren than is... Neither of them capable of giving in whatsoever. Both Seral and Pyre were too openly passionate, whereas Tal is more into himself. Doesn't make his current situation any better, do to Aren's previous affairs he's beyond jaded and despite being quiet, Tal wears his heart on his sleeve.
But somehow if this setup is an indicator, Tal is about to fuck up Aren's world with his meek disposition and silent yearnings. Where is room for anyone in this newly formed trinity? It seems so hopeless for any of the pairings.
Thank you for this chapter, Ro, it newer fails to excite me. (◕‸◕)ﾉ

Yahh, I just read over what I wrote.... I don't get it either.

Sorry, mass reviewing now, but I had to get this out.
So a couple of months back I asked you (under a different username) to explain a bit more about the world building going on here, the technological advancements, the different nationalities/ethnicities and whatnot, and you responded immediately after with an interlude on the subject matter.
I generally dislike to request anything of authors, as the story and writer are not mine to instruct or petition, so may I kindly 'SUGGEST' that you include an interlude to explain the world you've created a bit further?
How is Iron Dale structured from a hierarchical viewpoint? After rereading Oasis, I know it has a King, and a powerful army as well. What about Mertia? Does it have a ruling family? Are the two countries at war?
For the source material: Basing my presumptions on the language of Iron Dale as well as location and ethnicity of it's citizens (and perhaps slightly from real-life historical implications), it seems to be vaguely Northern/Germanic, (at least the spoken language is and the names sound that way too. Seral's native tongue also resembles a Latin language of some sort, and they come from further down (South). This is more my own interest in the story inspiration rather than an actual wish to understand the plot, so I'd understand if my latter inquiries go unanswered. Again, as mentioned in my first review, if this contains valuable future plot elements I completely understand if you ignore this, but I'd be very interested in knowing these things.
Good thoughts,
- Tori

I can't link to the doodle. The tablet it being what? xD I tried guessing a few things.

Anyway, have really enjoyed your story so far up to chapter 13 [that's as far as I've gotten so far,] but am eagerly finishing what you have posted.