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Hi vidalhbea. Your story has a lot of potential, but the basic spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors can be easily fixed by just reading over it before posting it. I know you do this for free, but it really improves the story when you take the time to go over it and correct mistakes and it shows you really care about the story and won't just drop it. Good job, though!

Cannot wait for the next chapter!! If you want/need a beta just email me!!! I need the chapter 4 like today! XD

Haha! I had a feeling Raine would taken Raven up on his offer :D The plot is intriguing, what will happen when Rocket is "reincarnated"? I can't wait to find out. I think this is going to be an epic tale, and Raine and Raven (or Rocket and Gadjet) will have many more adventures. The possibilities are endless!

This is such a cute story so far. I hope they bring down the bad guy together.

Aww, I wanna know who Gadjet is, and why he chose Rocket. Seems he knows him a little too well.

Sooo hot! This is your best chapter so far and definitely worth the wait. Poor Raine, I wonder how he's going to feel when he regains consciousness.

Thanks for the shout out, I'm truly flattered that I helped to inspire you. Hugs! xx

Dun dun dun, this doesn't look good for our hero.

I love the idea of this story and I'm interested to see where you'll take it. There are a few spelling mistakes that I would recommend you fix, as they kind of detract from the story, but other than that, great job, you are certainly improving. xx

I really like your idea for the story, it's so original and simply awesome!
There is only one chapter and I already like the two main characters <3 They seem interesting and I really want to know what's going to happen next.
What I do believe you should pay more attention to in your writing style is that you have to make a switch between telling things technically like 'he woke up, he wore clothes, he went to the kitchen, he ate breakfast.' - it leaves the reader at a situation where he just reads lists upon lists of technical actions the character does without any 'juice' to it. Try, instead, to add more of the character's point of view, it doesn't have to be complicated- just the basic stuff. Is he sleepy when he wakes up? Does his stomach grumble and so he goes and grabs something from the kitchen? Does he feel frustrated from all the crimes? Does he like the action of being a superhero? A whole chapter passed and I am yet to know anything about the main character except that he is a superhero.

Anyway- I really hope you're going to continue updating this story, I really want to read more of it \^v^/
Thank you <333
Lovely story so far!