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Holy damn, chapter two is hot! Wow!  That was delicious. Xoxo Robin

Holy sexy chapter, Batman!  That was so rawr and yum!  Excellent job. Xoxo Robin

Aww thank you for the story!  Loved it. Xoxo Robin

No! No! No! You can't end it now! I love this pairing ... I want more! Maybe a sequel? (Hint, hint) :D

Hi!

This was a cute story, but it would benefit greatly if you took the time to proof read, as there were many grammatical errors, including spelling and punctuation throughout the whole story. Or maybe you could use a Beta. There are many writers willing to help a novice and guide them in the right direction.

Also, rather than developing your plots, you seem to end your stories rather abruptly, which is a shame. It almost feels like you want to get the story over and done with, and as a reader that doesn't really encourage me to want to read your stories because I am left feeling a little empty. If you aren't able to commit to a long, epic story, maybe try writing one shots or drabbles as they don't take up as much time.

I hope my thoughts are a help. I see a lot of potential in your writing, I think you just need to spend more time on the basics.

Good luck with your next story! So far you have come up with some interesting characters and I'm sure with a bit of guidance, your overall skills will improve.

I love this story! I would like to read a sequel on how their relationship is doing, how he is balancing his superhero work with his schoolwork, and have more characters be introduced as friends and/or family to see how they react to their relationship!

I love where this is going. Raine has doubts, Raven wants more ... it's the perfect slashy scenario.

I can't wait to see what happens now that the boys have infiltrated Martel's gang. Will their cover get blown? Gah! I need to know!!!

I hope they don't get caught by the bad guy.

He seems to have accepted his new role rather well.

Go Gadjet go indeed! I think Raine is rather enjoying his new role a little TOO Zmuch :)