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I enjoyed your story tremendously. I was looking for a spicy off-world story and I am glad I found yours. Your writing and writing style are right on my frequency. I like the Hub traveling and the aliens. You also found nice names for their jobs pre-taker and lord-taker that have an aura of power. Here and there your character make some kind and very nice gesture: the ruler lets his short-lived beloved name a flower - maybe as short lived as him/ made me think of Taj Mahal/ -, and he chooses the name of a precious relative, though I don't really know why you planted the dinosaur to stomp on it.

However around the latest chapters, you seem to have lost patience with characters and plotting and rushed it. Feels a little ruined to me.. there is not a clear border between evil and good intentions.. everyone could be evil and good at the same time, some characters feel dismissed.. for Ari, immortality is a lucky gain and the process towards this is a little unbelievable and far too easy.. the point is you can still work on this to further develop as much as it pleases you.. society, customs, evolution, befriending new aliens species, adventures etc etc..

Thank you for your effort! may good things happen to you!

Can't wait to see how it ends. Wasn't expecting the turn the Thane resurrection took. Dang.

This is madness!

For every 100, 200 were lost? Ironically, not destroying planets needlessly is going to start looking very good now.

LMAO! No, he didn't! 'How could one birthed from my loins be so incompetent!' Kron's so bad.

Dagnabbit. Thane vs. Gael. Jeez, well at least now we know the real Thane's completely lost it...if he's launching lit up trees at Gael. He was a nature lover, after all.

Soooo unfair to Thane. Everything was. He would have been fine. Gael laid his ghost to rest. Blast it all.

What's going to happen to Jakred? He wasn't completely at fault. So, with the Hub gone, now they're going to have to use ships for everything again? At least they won't have to worry about radiation.

Glad that Ari's back, though the circumstances were pretty terrible. 'How could you hurt a man you once claimed to love?'

Just...craziness.

And I'm still wondering why Penalt wanted to forcibly bring Thane back in the first place...and just where he got Thane's essence from???

Great chapter!!!1 I loved the show down and again you found a way for everyone to be happy in the end^^ Can't wait for the last chapter although I'm sad to see this story end!!!! See you again in two weeks!!!!

Yay! So happy! But Thane's mind warping really made me sad. :(

Oh holy fuck! Shit just got real!♥

Not cool, is Ari really dead? Is there some way for Ari to inhabit Thane's body now that it is immortal again? Thane seems a little unstable and dangerous.

I'm still in shock from the last chapter. Wondering just what happened to Ari. I'm also confused as to how Thane has all this power and how his body changed.

It's really, really unfair to Thane. Poor thing was waiting for Gael for so long and people have been trying to manipulate the hell out of him...killing him, hoarding him, stuffing him in a human body...goodness people, give the guy a break!

On a tangent, Thane's star being on his belly button? Friggin hot.

Aaaand shit is hitting the fan everywhere. Don't know what's triggering it, but Thane's emotions are looking pretty unstable.

And poor Gael! Not to long ago, he had laid Thane's "ghost" to REST, ready to move on with the mix that was Thane and Ari in that current incarnation. Wouldn't Thane have "heard" that? The Thane that was forced into being knows nothing about Ari, where it seemed as if Ari and Thane were more in conjunction before...they caught sight of Gael's goods and were in perfect unison when they wanted to tap that ass. I mean, it seemed like the parts that were "Thane" only bubbled up during moments of intense longing, but otherwise were totally fine letting Ari take the driver's seat for the most part. This Thane's like "Ari who, motherfucker?"

Wait, did I miss something? How the heck did Kron find out about Thane's consciousness returning? Well, considering he's kind of been wandering about for the last several hundred years...he must have found out one way or another.

Aaaaargh it's SO frustrating that this Thane has no memories of Ari whatsoever...he wouldn't even be considering the part of him that's "Ari" as some stranger "standing between" him and Gael.

He's very fast on the uptake, I'll give him that much. "Can't you see someone brought me back as a weapon? Gimme a chance and I'll shank the bitch."

Even upon seeing footage of Ari...so frustrating. Thane, he's not your enemy, dagnabbit.

And goodness gracious, he even got a vision of chaos.

Friggin hell, Jakred is always getting the worst of it. Strapping him to explosives and mentally electrocuting him to near death...damn it all.

Ooooh shit. Ok so Thane has 'the destroyer' genes, which is probably why his power seems to only multiply as time goes on. And Kron is trying to shut him down, but he has some sort of time limit? Jakred once again is getting caught in the line of fire...and now, since Thane and Kron are duking it out in the hub, everyone who was in the middle of travelling is in danger.

Fun times.

That was really great!!! So Thane is not really evil just his power!!!! I like that I really would be sad if Aris past self would willingly hurt Geal. I really feel bad for Jakred!!! He is trying to do the right thing and is beeing tortured for it!!! Hope the will be abel to help him too!!! I hope they will find something with the mind scanns but that would probably bee to easy^^ See you again next week!!!

...Holy cow. I know I was waiting for an update and all, but this was crazy (Amazing!)