rate_review Reviews

Ha! This story! I like it. The meta humour is funny and not too overdone, And I also dislike 2nd person stories so it is very relatable! :P

Though to be fair, I'd have been equally happy with a story where Sarsa got to use her equipment. Though maybe that would be better in the third person!

I really do despise second-person stories. They are SO difficult to read, and I cannot imagine writing more than a few graphs in that manner.

Having said that, thanks for another entertaining installment of the story of a boy and his(?) demoness. The fandom meta aspects make it fun to read -- and what author hasn't sat by the computer, desperately refreshing in search of a review. (Don't tell anyone, but so far I've been spared any actual troll reviews).

I do appreciate that you're keeping the chapters short, because it really is a chore to read the "you" format. What made you decide to write in second-person? Did somebody run over your dog? ;)

I'm so happy to see another chapter of this and really hope you continue to do the monthly (or is it weekly?) challenges with this story. It's just too damn funny. Almost makes me long for my own troll. I have to say that I was probably as excited as your demoness when I got my firist review so I feel her pain at it being a flame, yikes, I'm empathizing with a hell bitch! Loved it again.

CL

Ah, Sheer brilliance! And I'm saved all the trouble of having to sacrifice any trolls (although I did dismember a Mary Sue in your honor). Now I will wait eagerly to see what happens on Sarsa's outing with her troll. I adore this demoness, I do!

The second chapter was just as funny as the first. The jabs and self inserted characters, to those trolls that comment with no intention of giving any real comment of meaning, and of course my fast favorite dick demon girl. It's an enjoyable read, and if you do another chapter I hope it's at a con. Seeing her interact with writers as bad as she is, or even better, talented writers, would be pretty funny.

And after reading your reply to my review...

I thought that he was gonna get raped. It's how most of these stories go.

I decided to read Under Joan's Bed and The Slumber Party and thought they were both funny and interesting. You manage to give just enough information to get one hooked into the short story, and a good payoff in both. Personally I liked Under Joan's Bed a little more, but that's because I've always loved the idea of the montser under the bed. It's not an idea you see often.

I'm just gonna tell you this is the first thing I've ever read of yours and I loved it! Now never mind me as I just go on snickering quietly to myself.

CL

This was hilarious! I literally laughed out loud twice -- at the revelation that the demon wrote Tarzan fanfiction (Tarzan? For some reason that seems perfect) and the title of the story itself (which reflects so much of what I've seen)! Very funny!

I think I am madly in love with you for this story. Seriously, this is probably one of my all-time favorite stories on AFF. It's sheer brilliance, and the prospect of a futanari demoness publishing her self-insert Mary Sue fics here on AFF is terrifyingly real, I assure you! I've sacrificed several trolls in the hopes of banishing such a creature, but it may have been in vain...

You are magnificent!!!

Hahaha, that last line made me laugh. "Still no fucking reviews though." Ah, don't we all know that feeling?

Ha! That was really fucking funny at the end when you said still no fucking reviews! I really liked it and I wish people did just take a minute or two to let you authors know our appreciation...I mean fuck...you guys spend months or even years writing these amazing extensions of your minds for us to be entertained and most cant even leave a little review to let you know how we felt about it. Not cool. Or worse...leave a mean review. I cant even imagine the courage it takes to just put it all out there and wait to see what people think. Props to you! And I really did love it and I look forward to reading more by you♥