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for You!

by JayDee

person pip
schedule August 16, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I didn't see this twist coming at all, but it's very clever, and a fitting end, I think :)

Loved all the little jokes in here, though I laughed out loud at: "There's an awkward moment where you wonder if you can get away with pretending you had spoken to the actual angel."

And this: "Kizurial is happier to provide exposition than anyone else you’ve met."

I won't spoil it for those who've yet to read, but I'm very happy with this. Thank you for finishing this story - it was well worth the wait. Excellent.

schedule July 11, 2018 at 12:00 AM

The Day Tarzan Left Jane For You, His True Love Sarsa.

Oh, You!

person Anon
schedule June 19, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Chapter 5

And that was a fitting ending to the story! I'll admit, I'll miss You, but honestly, I'm a little bit in love with Kizurial. If all seraphs were nerds, I might find that faith a tad more appealing. 

Now, it would probably be entirely inappropriate for me to mention the utter novelty of a no-sex chapter, but somehow it was not only fitting, but it also managed to make me think less than pure thoughts, which is a lovely trick (and possibly inspiration).

So, thank you! For the chapter, and for the story of You! :D

schedule June 18, 2018 at 12:00 AM

"I've got a review! Thirty stories uploaded, hundreds of chapters between them, thousands of hits and finally, a review on my newest story!"

 

Awww it was just: "You forgot to add the resemblance clause to your disclaimer."

 

:)

 

person pip
schedule January 10, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I know who you are now. I know how your story ends.

Meep! *runs and hides*

In contrast, I don't know anything! Who am I? Who is this Great Uncle Todd? And if he's rich enough to have a library why am I living in a semi-detached council house in the rural suburbs of the bad side of the city?

Is the entire thing an illusion? Who the hell is the second dead guy? How come he wasn't afraid when he died? That seems like a pretty neat trick, and rare enough to take notice of. I need more clues - I am the intellectual equivelent of a small spaniel dog faced with the Times cryptic crossword.

The YAOI overdose thing made me giggle, as did the Kate and Lupa banter.

I hope you'll write another chapter soon, and answer some of these questions. I mean, do I like girls?

So they've got the book that started all of this, if indeed it was that. I'm starting to think this goes back a little further. I could be wrong...

Thank you, JayDee :)

schedule January 4, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I actually might have peed a little when I saw that you'd updated this story!

OMG, poor guy, he's not going to be happy when he reads up on what he missed. I think I may have preferred to be stuck reading one of Sarsa's stories to witnessing the mess that was 2016.

Happy you're back at it. 

CL

person Anon
schedule January 4, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Oh, poor You! Just when You think it can't get any worse... an HP Mary-Sue fic written by Sarsa... ::shudders quite theatrically::

I quite like Lupa, however. Vampires with attitude work for me, but poor Kate was trapped with You in that nightmare for over a year! Although come to think of it, the trap explains everything from Bowie dying to people being stupid enough to vote Brexit and elect a Cheeto. 

It's lovely to have You back, and you, too, JayDee! :D

person pip
schedule January 4, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Marvellous, and well worth waiting for! :)

Although, I'm not sure I'd want to learn about 2016 all at once. The obituary section alone... *cringes*

I did have a little laugh about all his political expectations. I think just learning there'd been another Labour leadership election would have sent me into meltdown. Hell, it did that in real time.

Sarsa must be stopped! But how? And I do like the new characters... there's a little team of heroes forming here. I'll keep watching the news to see if they're winning... ;)

So glad to see you writing again, JayDee!

person pip
schedule February 15, 2016 at 12:00 AM
This is hilarious, and perfect, and I should have known if anyone could write a You story antidote, then it'd be.. you. Just brilliant... I wonder what report will come back from the convention. Thank you for this. :)
person julpups
schedule February 14, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god!That was just hilarious! It's not easy to find a story from you without gore etc. in a fandom I'm familiar with. So I'm settling with your Originals. Your're right. I generally dislike/not prefer second and first person stories. I like to be the observer, the witness, not the listener or the addressee. You can call it also voyeurism :P There can be exceptions, though. If you wrote a fellatio in POV style in second person, it wouldn't raise much protest I guess.:D A very unique sense of humor you've got here. I'll browsing more of your stories.