rate_review Reviews

This was so hot. Also, apple curse. I love it. Though, I should have probably saved reading this until after the oncoming angst that is sure to be in DM...oh well, I can take it.

This was so much fun to read. Daniel is adorable and Mark reminds me of the semes you'll find in Yaoi manga: cocky, patient with his would-be lover's nervousness, and with strong undertones of just-plain-naughty.

I would love to see that playing with himself stuff in the kitchen drawn out a little more. The picture was painted well, it just seemed over quicker than it had begun.

Mark getting so worked up over every little thing Daniel does is so well done that it managed to pull me right out of my default editor mode. For a few minutes there, I forgot all about being nitpicky and just enjoyed it.

Your writing is far from terrible. If you're really new to this, I'm impressed. Take care, Tahn, and keep the creative juices flowing. (That sounded dirty on purpose, btw.)

Wow Tahn that was hot! Who knew you had it in you? I didn't know you wrote. I guess I need to check out my readers more carefully.

Don't let Lisa's comment discourage you, I think your writing is pretty damn good not at all as iffy as mine. LOL. I really enjoyed it!

CL

Omg, Tahn, what a great story!!! :) I loved it!

Your writing is so good - on a par with CL's. I don't know why I haven't read anything from you before. I'm gonna have to change that. :)

I thought it was great. I just finished rereading dragon king when I read this story. Can't wait for the sequel.