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Welp it was Fox. So terribly sad. I'm one of those people who usually don't start to read MCD stories lol bc I'm obviously a baby haha! But in this story technically Fox isn't a main character....meaning he is part of the story but theres a lot more going on. Since I've read the prequel and this somehow I can handle his death....you reeled me in and I'm stuck on this ship till the end! :P Also I wish people would realize whichever direction the author decides to take it is ok bc hey it's their prerogative! So as sad as I am I do see how completely necessary it was to kill Fox and how unfair it was---bc it's supposed to be! That's the whole point. It's not fair Fox had to die and that's what you are conveying. Also poor sweet Cyril. I'm too sensitive and I both love and hate sad things but I think there will be beauty in the ashes so to speak with how Cyril will handle this. Although I can't handle it sometimes but there is so much beauty in tragedies and I suspect we will see a lot of that in Cyril's chapter...,I know it will be cathartic and beautiful. And it will be curious to see what the "mind frame" will be since it's hard to really imagine that kind of pain. Anyways sorry for rambling I just do hope poor Cyril gets some closure. He has had to deal with so much and is somewhat of a tragic character but at least his sons will be there! Is it bad I don't want him to end up with anyone else tho? Lol it's totally selfish/unrealistic but I'm being a romantic fool and am all like Fox x Cyril foreverrrr. Anyways looking forward to more! Thanks for writing such an emotional story! :-)

Oh shit that was so emotionally draining! I fucking loved it! And as much as I love Cyril and Fox together...he had to die. I get it. I loved how Kita was there with him and Fox said "Tell them I love them"...I cried like a little bitch with a skinned knee. My heart is breaking for Cyril...and im pretty sure Bitch Glenning is gonna find out that Cyril may be small BUT she fucked with the wrong Lierian. He is gonna jump all over her ass like a fucking spider monkey given the chance! Cant wait for more!♥

This chapter was heartbreaking. It was a bit mean to make us assist to Fox's death through Nikita's eyes and assist to Cyril breakdown through Emory's eyes. It would have been far less painful without the body, the cruelty of that decapitation evoked newly.
I understand why Fox and not Mack is dead. However, as a reader I had a lot more time to bond with Fox and this is the only reason of my preference expressed in earlier review. In this installment the POV is switched between 4 characters, not enough time one to one with any of them to feel the same affection I feel towards Cyril/Fox.
Understanding the mechanics of a story doesn't stop me from feeling deeply sad.

I don't hate the author. but I dislike where you took the story. You made us love the characters, too much, with all their faults. So we grieve for the characters we became overly invested in. I guess that's why I'll never be a good writer because I couldn't kill off a character that I have affection for. But it doesn't mean I'll stop reading your story. For the story has more value than most on AFF no matter where you take it. Don't be mad at your readers for feeling intimately involved with your characters... in a way really its a compliment to your skill!
Gslinger

Omg...I shouldn't have read this right after I put my makeup on...*wipes tears away*

While I didn't like Fox dying, I can see where it fits within the narrative. This is Emory's and Atara's tale and considering the world in which they live, a father's death is a good plot point for personal growth as well as social conflict and eventual change.

Nobody likes to get snarked at but you don't get anger, angst or even mild disapproval in a void of indifference. Ultimately it's probably the most honest review of your talent.

Enjoying the fic.

I am crying uncontrollably right now. I need to go sit in a dark room and try to get over this.

Great writing, amazing story, but gosh... sooo sad.

I'm gonna go cry some more now.

I broke my other computer cause I got pissed off at the fact that I tried three times to give you a review... I'm now using another computer that doesn't quite work as well as the other... I'm currently bidding on a newer one on ebay... I wanted or at least tried to say the following... DON"T kill Cyril off that is just plain stupid. You wrote that the first person Cyril thought of as dead was Atara and I myself have a child and I know that no matter who it is that dies your child dying would be the worst even more so then your childhood family members. Besides Cyrils other father went on with his life. I'm also glad that Fox was killed fairly quickly and painlessly. I'm also relieved that he did't die alone and was able to say what he did. I'm glad of his quick death just from how you described how he had been treated like Emory was thinking it would be worse if you had to wait for a person you loved to waste away and I think that would have been Fox. I cried through both chapters and YES I went through a box of tissues and maybe half a roll of toilet paper... I know the other reviews I wrote were better then this one but I'll be damned if I can remember them cause I haven't used this computer in a while and I had to update, scan, disk clean, de-bug, de-frag and restart but it'll have to do for now what sucks the most if the left click button only works on occasion and the same happens with the A button and this one doesn't automatically spell correct which is good and bad. OH I just remembered something else I put in the first three reviews: I think you should have a contest with your readers about how lady glenning should be dealt with. I my self would like to see her collared on the post and treated like the slaves she's used and abused... Also I would like to see the counsel members given the rite in the middle of their nation without drugs and the temple members whipped just like Fox for joining in the slaughter of their followers and non followers. I think that if Atara has Mack's child maybe Cyril might had something more to live for and I think maybe if by some miracle that Emory could have a child that would be awesome... I'm also glad that you have set us up for the torture that Kita is about to go through via Emory and the fact that you have made him Glacian helps too. I would like to see how Kita's father reacts to his son's confinement by lady glenning and I was also wondering what happened to Mack's father? I hope Atara got to say good-bye to Fox before he was taken away.... much love to you and yours! thank YOU for sharing as always!

I broke my other computer cause I got pissed off at the fact that I tried three times to give you a review... I'm now using another computer that doesn't quite work as well as the other... I'm currently bidding on a newer one on ebay... I wanted or at least tried to say the following... DON"T kill Cyril off that is just plain stupid. You wrote that the first person Cyril thought of as dead was Atara and I myself have a child and I know that no matter who it is that dies your child dying would be the worst even more so then your childhood family members. Besides Cyrils other father went on with his life. I'm also glad that Fox was killed fairly quickly and painlessly. I'm also relieved that he did't die alone and was able to say what he did. I'm glad of his quick death just from how you described how he had been treated like Emory was thinking it would be worse if you had to wait for a person you loved to waste away and I think that would have been Fox. I cried through both chapters and YES I went through a box of tissues and maybe half a roll of toilet paper... I know the other reviews I wrote were better then this one but I'll be damned if I can remember them cause I haven't used this computer in a while and I had to update, scan, disk clean, de-bug, de-frag and restart but it'll have to do for now what sucks the most if the left click button only works on occasion and the same happens with the A button and this one doesn't automatically spell correct which is good and bad. OH I just remembered something else I put in the first three reviews: I think you should have a contest with your readers about how lady glenning should be dealt with. I my self would like to see her collared on the post and treated like the slaves she's used and abused... Also I would like to see the counsel members given the rite in the middle of their nation without drugs and the temple members whipped just like Fox for joining in the slaughter of their followers and non followers. I think that if Atara has Mack's child maybe Cyril might had something more to live for and I think maybe if by some miracle that Emory could have a child that would be awesome... I'm also glad that you have set us up for the torture that Kita is about to go through via Emory and the fact that you have made him Glacian helps too. I would like to see how Kita's father reacts to his son's confinement by lady glenning and I was also wondering what happened to Mack's father? I hope Atara got to say good-bye to Fox before he was taken away.... much love to you and yours! thank YOU for sharing as always!

Majorly shocked that Fox died....

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Yup, still shocked...

For a second, I thought, maybe it wasn't him and you were faking his death...

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He died...

I can't believe he died...

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OMG.