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for magic or love

by vidalhbea

person Semaya
schedule March 1, 2015 at 12:00 AM
The chapter was pretty confusing and seemed to jump around with no warning. Also it was a little confusing to have the dialogue of one character be in the same paragraph as another's. The story would be easier to follow if you had a line of Ren's dialogue and then put Eiji's on another line so that we're aware that another person is talking. I like the concept though!