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May 6, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Another wonderful chapter drawing the reader into the story. I particularly liked the part where Duro widened his legs to accommodate the rocking motion of the boat. Not very important, some might say, but it's the small things you add that makes the picture in the mind so clear to see.
There is only one teeny tiny thing that I want to question, and it is this; Tito stopped and turned to me. “Did you fuck him?”
I question it because, in my mind, Tito is asking Duro if he performed penetrated sex on another, as in , did Duro top Clitis. Personally I think it might have been better if written; Tito stopped and turned to me. "Did you let him fuck you?" Or... Tito stopped and turned to me. "Did he fuck you?" This puts Duro on the bottom, and just seems to make more sense to me.
Can't wait for the next chapter. So happy to hear that it won't be too long in appearing :D
There is only one teeny tiny thing that I want to question, and it is this; Tito stopped and turned to me. “Did you fuck him?”
I question it because, in my mind, Tito is asking Duro if he performed penetrated sex on another, as in , did Duro top Clitis. Personally I think it might have been better if written; Tito stopped and turned to me. "Did you let him fuck you?" Or... Tito stopped and turned to me. "Did he fuck you?" This puts Duro on the bottom, and just seems to make more sense to me.
Can't wait for the next chapter. So happy to hear that it won't be too long in appearing :D
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May 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I missed this! Not meant as criticism at your need to deal with 'real life' - just want you to know your talent is appreciated.
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April 11, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I love it more the more i read
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April 11, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Ooh, I was so happy to find a new chapter for my bedtime reading tonight.
Tito really has to be more cautious of his little slave's wellbeing, especially around people like Maro. And I'm hoping that split skin doesn't become infected. That could cause even more problems for Duro.
I like how Clavius and Sten appear to be friendly towards the boy; offering kind words and offers of help. And I really am intrigued by Clitus... who seems amicable and approachable. I'm looking forward to hearing more of his history.
Have to say my favourite part of this chapter was the last section, which described a perfect setting at sea. I could almost smell the salty breeze with them. But is that perfectly pretty setting just the calm before the storm?
And, I'm working on editing and polishing the next chapter of my story. Just keep poking me, lol
Tito really has to be more cautious of his little slave's wellbeing, especially around people like Maro. And I'm hoping that split skin doesn't become infected. That could cause even more problems for Duro.
I like how Clavius and Sten appear to be friendly towards the boy; offering kind words and offers of help. And I really am intrigued by Clitus... who seems amicable and approachable. I'm looking forward to hearing more of his history.
Have to say my favourite part of this chapter was the last section, which described a perfect setting at sea. I could almost smell the salty breeze with them. But is that perfectly pretty setting just the calm before the storm?
And, I'm working on editing and polishing the next chapter of my story. Just keep poking me, lol
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April 8, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoy your writing style, it's clear and to the point. Looking forward to the next chapter!
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March 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
oh my god great great great
i can not wait until Tito take his slave to home i love to read how his wife react to slave .
i have feeling Tito 'home would be worst for our little slave
i can not wait until Tito take his slave to home i love to read how his wife react to slave .
i have feeling Tito 'home would be worst for our little slave
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March 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I like the update, please continue to write and post <3
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March 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter which has left me sorely wanting to read more. And which has, of course, left me guessing and jumping in all directions as to what is going to happen next. I'm pretty sure, much like the boat ride, that life is going to get a bit choppy for our favourite slave. And for Tito too, by the looks of things.
So glad to hear this story gets priority. And nope, there is no rush for you to hurry.
Is the next chapter done yet?
Is the next chapter done yet?
Is the next chapter done yet?
lol...
So glad to hear this story gets priority. And nope, there is no rush for you to hurry.
Is the next chapter done yet?
Is the next chapter done yet?
Is the next chapter done yet?
lol...
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March 19, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This story is amazing! I can't wait for the next chapter!
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March 6, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Its surprisingly good
I really like you writing style, and hope to read more of this story soon! Be sure you hear from me again after you update more chapters ,because I am determinded to follow it from now on. Its really interesting and original. The dynamics between the characters is not like anything I have read before. Its also refreshing to read a story from a slaves point of view without him being a soulless mindless robot.
I really like you writing style, and hope to read more of this story soon! Be sure you hear from me again after you update more chapters ,because I am determinded to follow it from now on. Its really interesting and original. The dynamics between the characters is not like anything I have read before. Its also refreshing to read a story from a slaves point of view without him being a soulless mindless robot.