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for Hollow Earth

by Windstryke

person Moku_Sui
schedule November 22, 2014 at 12:00 AM
omg...
Good luck on finals! I'm in the same boat!
schedule November 22, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter, really interesting back story for Azel, can't wait for more. Really wondering when, hopefully when and not if, Azel takes a stand against his uncle.

Also, side note, this story really must have dug into my subconscious, because I started writing a story and inadvertently named one of my characters Theorin...I'm gonna have to change that now.
person Moku_Sui
schedule November 10, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Omg! What's azel going to do?? And how is theorin going to react to azel now??? TT
person Angel
schedule November 10, 2014 at 12:00 AM
What I'm not understanding is how Azel is able to make other people his bitch and apparently has this unbelievably bad temper, yet he isn't able to defend Theorin from his uncle. Because if I were him I would beat the shit out of my uncle. Just saying.
person iriskzk1
schedule November 10, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Azel needs to grow some balls and knock his uncle out. His uncle has so much control over him and now I'm wondering why? What happened in the past that makes him so vulnerable to his uncle.
person wolfluv
schedule November 5, 2014 at 12:00 AM
WOW that was intense... I'm starting to dig on this story I look forward to seeing what happens... I know this sounds harsh but I'm kinda hoping that his uncle dies in a cave in.. ya know just say... read ya laters!
person Anon
schedule November 4, 2014 at 12:00 AM
The story is really good so far but I found a mistake, being a PSW I have come across dealing with catheter bags. You can't insert a catheter into the wrist, a catheter is for pee hun. The word you are looking for is intravenous or IV for short.
person Mona Thompson
schedule November 3, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Whew! Where to begin? First...I love your style of writing. I can picture everything perfectly because of the way you describe them. And second...I absolutely love Azel. His uncle is pretty scary but I like Bruce...he seems to genuinely care about the slaves. I can see this story is going to be an emotional roller-coaster for me...just the way I like it. So keep it coming! And thank you for sharing your talent with us :)
person Moku_Sui
schedule October 29, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Wowwww. I'm really curious to see how this goes
schedule October 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I am hooked. I like your writing style (I'm also following Oblivion though I'm not sure if I've left a review there). I also like that you've already shown a bit of range between the owners from sadistic to compassionate. I am curious to see how many of the story tags end up being between Azel and the the slave...Azel so far doesn't seem sadistic.

-Eve

(Since I do enjoy your style, it'd be a huge compliment if, and I'm not asking you too, just if you have read my story 'Control' at all, parts of that aren't for the faint of heart either)