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for She is the One

by Jashley13

person Anon - DT
schedule September 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Superb chapter, really well written and capturing all the kind of thoughts and mannerisms you would experience and witness in such similar situations.  Excellent.  Also, I would totally read a book about Rhona, she has such a load of character with her eccentricities and surprising relatability.  I can think of some people I've known like her, some for the better, some for the not so better (they're still good people, but conflict with them is so freaking difficult, you really have to work for them).

Looking forward to the upcoming chapters upon your return.  Sucks that we're gonna be left hanging this long but you really did finish on a note that is up there with the best stuff from your early chapters (which probably remain my fave ones, even if they lacked Rhona).

person dadbrough
schedule September 1, 2016 at 12:00 AM

OMG!! NNNNOoOOOOOOOOOO!!!! Leave us hanging with Kayla, No doubt, Outside the door? How could you? ..........Guess your great writing and suspenseful breaks are what makes this story so fantastic. Can hardly wait for the next installment. PLEASE HURRY!!.....Lol, keep it going, and keep up the great work.

person DT
schedule August 27, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Loved the new chapter!  I don't know what it is about Rhona-centric stuff but I just find her such an interesting character in this story compared to most.  Her friends seem interesting, too.  It's refreshing to be away from all the drama back "home" for a while and to get something new.  Keep up the good work!  Hoping Rhona and Jack will sort things out in the long run (I'll be sad the day that Rhona is no longer in the story when Jack has to move), but excited for the drama that will happen inbetween then and now.

Thanks for the new chapter, can't wait for the next one!

person Loth-Cat
schedule August 23, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Chap. 57: Damn something is happening here. Tho a sucker for drama, I hope to read more of some good times....Jack and Kayla have it hard....Rhona is such a wild card....She is scary.

person I hate Jack.
schedule August 22, 2016 at 12:00 AM

I love this series, and I love how you can bring out all these emotions in me about the characters, especially my feelings of exasperation and hatred of Jack. He literally thinks and acts like the biggest pansy ever. Keep it up!

person dadbrough
schedule August 22, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Awesome, and you described one of those con's perfectly. How many people do they really need to man one of those booths, whop know nothing about what they are respresenting?  Just saying.Anyway awesome ( think i said that already) keep up the great story line.

person dadbrough
schedule August 13, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Awesome as usual, a little abstract on the character communication, but it all eventually tied together. Keep up the great work

person Old grandpa
schedule August 5, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Been reading this from the start,brings me back. I can relate to much of the story. This last chapter is losing me,too much detail, remember I'm old(lol).

person Lustlord59
schedule August 4, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Hey man just spend time with the story in last year of high school kinda short with junior year and lots of funny lines keep it up dude.

person Anonymous
schedule July 31, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Hey man can u give a song list like Northern Lights by Jaymes Young