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January 11, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Well you did it again!!! OUTSTANDING!! Felt like I was watching a moving and sitting on the edge of the seat the hole time. Very good.
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January 10, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the new chapter, it was wonderful as always :) You are truly talented and I look forward to reading your new chapters more than any other story.
Always looking forward to seeing what kind of troubles and joy lay ahead.
Always looking forward to seeing what kind of troubles and joy lay ahead.
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January 8, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I read quite a bit and I must say that there are not a lot of writers out there who can make you feel for the characters as a real individual ,empathise with them and I'm happy to say that you are one of them. I mean, after chapter 21, I had a lot of anger towards Kayla but after reading the latest one, the feeling changed. Definitely one of the best I have read. So, keep it up man! Good Luck!
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January 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
At last. Good chapter. Liked the session with the shrink. Don't worry about getting too feeley. That is what the story is about - feelings. Keep going you're doing a good job. Looking forward to your next offering.
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January 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This is on chapter 11; love the story so far. Lol ive been singing the words "oh no" for the past gen minutes. Because I knew exactly what the roar was and why it happened. They got caught x.x holy shit. Shoulda known it was gonna happen. But I never saw it coming. Once again, I love your work. =D hope you do more.
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January 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Please tell me you're not ending it here. Man this story is awesome. You should consider the possibility of this Jeff character coming for a 'visit.' I love the shakespeare quotes thrown in at random. I may not understand all of them lol but I like it. Just please don't tell me it's over.
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January 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Fan-fucking-tastic.
No sarcasm.
I've been with this story and its illustrious author since his humble origins back on xnxx. I check every day for an update. Please, never stop writing.
No sarcasm.
I've been with this story and its illustrious author since his humble origins back on xnxx. I check every day for an update. Please, never stop writing.
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January 1, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I know no words. For the last part, my body has been trembling uncontrollably. It was pretty difficult to rein in my emotions.
I put myself in Jack's place. I can do that, put myself in someone's place for some amount of time. It felt real. It felt painful. It felt like I was being torn apart in two directions, to either demand justice, or to turn the other cheek. The way I see it, there is no middle ground unless you are a person too good. Jack is a person too good. I failed, to achieve middle ground. It made me realise stuff...
Still suffering from the hangover. Chapter 22 is something I cannot wait for.
I put myself in Jack's place. I can do that, put myself in someone's place for some amount of time. It felt real. It felt painful. It felt like I was being torn apart in two directions, to either demand justice, or to turn the other cheek. The way I see it, there is no middle ground unless you are a person too good. Jack is a person too good. I failed, to achieve middle ground. It made me realise stuff...
Still suffering from the hangover. Chapter 22 is something I cannot wait for.
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December 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Followed you over here from the previous site and I will say that I am a huge fan. Jashley13's characters are great because you can actually relate to them and they tend to remind you of people you knew when you were in school. I can't wait to see what Jack, Kayla and gang get into in the next chapter.
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December 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I've been reading your story/ies since I saw them on XNXX, though things are different with both the characters & the people they're based on, there's more than a few similarities to me an old ex.
Things never got to the physical side between us, as we were not in the the same city, & I felt we should wait till we both wanted to progress before things got physical between us, so that that wasn't just what was wanted or needed.
After fully committing myself to giving us a real chance to be together as a couple, I stopped talking to a lot of my female friends, not because I'd stray, but because I'd committed to her only.
With your latest chapter about Kayla receiving txts/calls from her ex, & in a previous chapter with a conversation between Kayla & Tara, I suspected that one of them had suggested either about a threesome, or similar, & with how Kayla had started to draw away from Jack when her phone beeped, I sensed something was different, because of what I experienced too.
After being betrayed by my ex, hers & our mutual friends assumed I had hurt her, so sent me msgs like "kill yourself", "you deserved it" etc, because she either lied, or diddn't correct them for assuming I'd hurt her (& not the other way around),only after realising I had been hurt so much, & that she waited until after I had fully committed myself to only her, did she ever show any remorse (if any of it was real anyway.
Like with how you ended Chapt. 21 with Jack & Kayla arguing with the text msgs being seen, & how you worded the thoughts & afterthoughts of each & every word actually said the other, thats how things became between us, disconnected, jumbled etc, you had her knowing she'd lied off the bat about not being a virgin, but also not telling Jack he was still trying to get into her pants too, & how Jack was so angry, not just being lied to, but thinking that she didn't think he was worth the truth, that her attempt with the threesome was in part at least was to get him even with her.
After mths of being separated, but only wks after us separating, my ex met someone else, telling me he was "just a friend" etc, her telling me he reminded her of me, how kind, caring, loving he was etc, effectively breaking my heart with each word, over & over again. Months later telling me that she was willing to ask him if "we" could have sex, which she later said was a mistake to even say (although I doubt it, it was probably just because she thought I'd say yes like any other guy would have), but like Jack, I thought about her only, even going so far as to rewrite a poem & wedding vows I wrote a long time ago, because I thought that given the chance, we could get that far. If anything, her even suggesting about meeting for sex, made me sick to my stomach, even repulsed that she ever even thought I'd say yes, it left me feeling like I was being ripped apart atom by atom, & being reconstituted with me mouth as my asshole...
To 90% of the male populace that may have been an instant yes, but like with Jack, I thought of how it'd make her feel, effectively being forced to have sex with me, & think that surprised her more than anything, that I was so selfless thinking about how much it could hurt her to think of herself being used as a piece of meat, or disposable sex toy.
I think she grew to truly hate me for thinking that she was worth more than using for sex, for thinking she deserved better than than that, because I ended up with all the pain, while her & whomever else she got to fuck her had all the pleasure.
Earlier this yr, I was woken up by knocking at my door, it was the police... Turns out after keeping my word & leaving her alone for over a yr, she reported me to the police... Alleging I had photo/videographic evidence of her performing acts, I hadn't even had a video phone at the time, & my camera was a poor quality to have taken such graphic pictures, they seized my property.
I was later cleared of all allegations, but the damage & toll it took on me will take yrs to recover from, if at all, I have not even attempted to contact my ex since, as I now know that I never meant anything to her, & she didn't deserve to be given my heart if all she wanted to do was cut it into pieces.
I haven't written this to get sympathy etc, I just wanted you to know that even though this story is fiction, similar parts when played out in real life, are as widely felt as you've given to your characters.
All the best with the continuance of this story.
Things never got to the physical side between us, as we were not in the the same city, & I felt we should wait till we both wanted to progress before things got physical between us, so that that wasn't just what was wanted or needed.
After fully committing myself to giving us a real chance to be together as a couple, I stopped talking to a lot of my female friends, not because I'd stray, but because I'd committed to her only.
With your latest chapter about Kayla receiving txts/calls from her ex, & in a previous chapter with a conversation between Kayla & Tara, I suspected that one of them had suggested either about a threesome, or similar, & with how Kayla had started to draw away from Jack when her phone beeped, I sensed something was different, because of what I experienced too.
After being betrayed by my ex, hers & our mutual friends assumed I had hurt her, so sent me msgs like "kill yourself", "you deserved it" etc, because she either lied, or diddn't correct them for assuming I'd hurt her (& not the other way around),only after realising I had been hurt so much, & that she waited until after I had fully committed myself to only her, did she ever show any remorse (if any of it was real anyway.
Like with how you ended Chapt. 21 with Jack & Kayla arguing with the text msgs being seen, & how you worded the thoughts & afterthoughts of each & every word actually said the other, thats how things became between us, disconnected, jumbled etc, you had her knowing she'd lied off the bat about not being a virgin, but also not telling Jack he was still trying to get into her pants too, & how Jack was so angry, not just being lied to, but thinking that she didn't think he was worth the truth, that her attempt with the threesome was in part at least was to get him even with her.
After mths of being separated, but only wks after us separating, my ex met someone else, telling me he was "just a friend" etc, her telling me he reminded her of me, how kind, caring, loving he was etc, effectively breaking my heart with each word, over & over again. Months later telling me that she was willing to ask him if "we" could have sex, which she later said was a mistake to even say (although I doubt it, it was probably just because she thought I'd say yes like any other guy would have), but like Jack, I thought about her only, even going so far as to rewrite a poem & wedding vows I wrote a long time ago, because I thought that given the chance, we could get that far. If anything, her even suggesting about meeting for sex, made me sick to my stomach, even repulsed that she ever even thought I'd say yes, it left me feeling like I was being ripped apart atom by atom, & being reconstituted with me mouth as my asshole...
To 90% of the male populace that may have been an instant yes, but like with Jack, I thought of how it'd make her feel, effectively being forced to have sex with me, & think that surprised her more than anything, that I was so selfless thinking about how much it could hurt her to think of herself being used as a piece of meat, or disposable sex toy.
I think she grew to truly hate me for thinking that she was worth more than using for sex, for thinking she deserved better than than that, because I ended up with all the pain, while her & whomever else she got to fuck her had all the pleasure.
Earlier this yr, I was woken up by knocking at my door, it was the police... Turns out after keeping my word & leaving her alone for over a yr, she reported me to the police... Alleging I had photo/videographic evidence of her performing acts, I hadn't even had a video phone at the time, & my camera was a poor quality to have taken such graphic pictures, they seized my property.
I was later cleared of all allegations, but the damage & toll it took on me will take yrs to recover from, if at all, I have not even attempted to contact my ex since, as I now know that I never meant anything to her, & she didn't deserve to be given my heart if all she wanted to do was cut it into pieces.
I haven't written this to get sympathy etc, I just wanted you to know that even though this story is fiction, similar parts when played out in real life, are as widely felt as you've given to your characters.
All the best with the continuance of this story.