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This is one of the best stories I have ever read, keep up the good work, Jashley13, I just released a story, and reading yours inspired me to do it. Thank you. If you would like to read it, my pen-name is Parlabane24.

Yes I fucking knew it and called it. I knew and hoped that they were not given up on. I may caome off as weird but definitely cannot wait for next Ch.

Well, I'm just waiting for Ch 33, and I gotta say, I'm not really looking forward to it. Jack really struck me as honorable, and a *spoilers, readers* threesome with his cousin is NOT remotely in his character, nor does it seem to be in Kayla's. It's totally ruining my perception of their honest and dedicated relationship, just to slut out for a threesome. I love this story, but this twist is just too much for me. Sadly, one more, and I think my need to finish the tale will be overruled by the sharp character changes that make no sense. I get the need to write something "hot" and edgy, but when it overrides your main character's personalities...it ruins the whole thing. I am sorry - if this next chapter has this threesome, it's storybreaking for me. The Jack and Kayla you started with would never do that in a million years. I am so sorry, I just can't.

AWESOME.........as usual. Can hardly wait for the MAIN event, lol. Keep up the good work.

Glad you were able to finally get another chapter in. A lot of mental wrangling in this one. Did he make the correct decision? That's what the cliffhanger is about. How is Kayla going to feel about it in the coming months.
Maybe she will be in a little F/F action.? Good site for the experiment. Nobody can go home to think about it. Maybe after this it will become a nude week.

B

Great Story

hey jashley, listen, i've been reading this story since you started writing the first chapter up until you got that threat when you were writing on xnxx. Then i found you here and i was glad i could continue reading your stories again. I'm on chapter 27 and sorta skipped through till 31 looking for some hint that alan and amanda may be getting back together but nothing. I think it may be a deciding factor for me to continue reading the story to know if they have a chance down the line because this is literally giving me heartache knowing that they're forced to be apart. Just from personal experience i guess, i can relate to being forced apart. you dont have to tell me in details but i would really appreciate it if you could tell me if they have a chance or not of getting back together.

I gotta say, even though I am too lazy to log in to review with a profile link, I'm hooked. I started this story with some skepticism, being not a fan of incest OR the perceived making fun of the bible (which I totally understand the usage of now, btw), but now I can't stop reading it. I relate a lot to several of the characters and can see some parallels from my own time at high school - hard to believe that was 13 years ago (now I feel old...lol!). I gotta say, this one ranks up with one of my all time favorite fics, and I am already telling people to come read this! Hopefully you get the same fandom following that the lady that wrote Twilight did (because frankly this is a million times better!) I can't find one single flaw in your writing and envy your ability to keep readers engaged with such long, detailed chapters with filler and it never gets boring! Though I gotta point out, in chapter eight you said that Kayle "broke" her own hymen - medically, that doesn't happen. The hymen actually stretches with use, and the skin becomes more elastic. It doesn't actually "break" - and if it does, or there is blood, something went very wrong and the girl needs to go see an OB. Just wanted to mention that! Otherwise, this one is a 10 out of 10!

Great , again. This has some pretty good suspense going on. Who s Rhona really?? Whats going to happen with BOTH girls ont eh camping trip. Will Allan grab this New girl and hang on with both hands?? Just hope hes gentle, lol. Keep the story rolling, its FANTASTIC!

I love you, Jashley13.

I'm seriously.

I'm straight, so this is more of a bromance than anything else. An unrequited bromance, for that.
If you do see this, get back to me on the comments. Please.