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ummmm loved this story but where's the rest of it! dying here, please HELP!

I love the mafia being brought in amd the way the soulmates meet through words instead of through touch or marks.

Another fun chapter. The sorta consent sex scene was hilarious to begin with but got nice and steamy. It was pure genius! I love how Brody was already questioning if he could throw his soulmate in jail (or his death). It showed just how important soulmates are, even if he is a sociopath. I can't wait to see what his choice will be.

Reading the other comments you got I noticed one that stated guns could go through tables and the the knife wouldn't cut the shirt without cutting into Brody. While I'm not discrediting this their is a lot that factor in. Such as ( with the gun) you have to take in gun type,wind resistance, distance from shooter,thickness of table, and wood type or plastic table or metal table. If its a pretty small callibur and the table was strong oak or titanium it could in deed stop the bullet. Aka don't worry about it unless this is the final draft. Oh and the shirt thing works if the blade is facing away from Brody. I know I've tried it before.

Well this is like it's going to be an interesting story to read I'm looking forward to more

Yes that was much better than talking
thank you so much for saying this amazing work of fiction
please continue

Oh wow! I really enjoyed it! Please update soon. Pretty pleaseeee...

This is pretty entertaining, even without knowing who these people are- fun concept, entertaining dialogue, and I do like me an unhinged mob boss or two. I'd strongly encourage you to edit before you post, not for phrasing and suchlike, your words are fine, but for the typos and for the missing words. I'll probably keep reading anyway though.

Just one thing, tables do not stop bullets, not even close, not even a little bit. Drywalls and sheet metal and car doors don't stop bullets: give them concrete or something. Physics says everyone in that room is dead. Physics also says you can't use a chest as a cutting board and slice through fabric (which moves with the blade, so you have to apply pressure) without making a nice long cut in that chest as well.

But yeah like I said I'm highly entertained by everyone's lack of sanity, so I'll be back. :)

This is freaking awesome! To be honest I wasn't expecting much but then this just blew me away. I hope you update soon. :p

I'm guilty of asking for a series from the supposed oneshot
I am not sorry
Phew, this was hot
I wish we had emoticons to express how I feel right now XD

O man this story is AWSUM!!!! Plz continue & update!!! I cant wait 2 c how the relationship developes!!!

Rukia