This was a hilariously story
Seeing it being told in dialogue was kind of a shock. I had flashbacks to old scriptfics, but fuck it does really work here. No trouble keeping apart who is who either, since she stays in character throughout. I don't tend to go for ageplay stuff, but the humour side really helped.
It really was funny! His bafflement at all of it really sold everything, and clearly she does have the strong will he noticed since she's playing submissive but totally getting her own way. That line about how he's a serial rapist, or will be when he finds someone else, was dark as heck but hilarious. Also the shortbus mention.
Great ending too, especially that discussion about why he picked her and what he aimed for - guess it worked out without working out how he wanted. Nice one!
This is hilarious! I couldn't sop laughing! My husband liked it, too!