rate_review Reviews

Looking forward to the next chapter^^

This story is so gloriously amazing I could cry. The world is so interesting and written so cleverly. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. :)

Wow I almost thought that was the end for him......hope "his friendly" ethros gets the other one...cause if he dies, the poor guy is out of luck then.....This was a very emanational one !!!!!!!!! see you next then !!!!!!!

Have been reading this story from the beginning and have continuously enjoyed the pace, the projection and the multivalent components, as they settle into a stabilising place with each chapter submitted. It is poignant and distinct in both delivery and structure. Your ideas and thoughts are expressed deftly in your work, please keep the sanctity of the story all your own without adjustment as you have created a wonderfully perplexing story with incredible mystery and build.

Thank you for your continued writing.

A beta reader is always useful to have, if only to discuss story flow. As far as the writing itself goes, it's very good. There aren't so many typos that it detracts from the story, so there's no need to worry too much.

Prye is getting to lax with the Eithos...yiu don't know what's going to happen next...It's acting like Prye is a child that needs to be watched !!! hahahha the pace is ok, just really want to see what happens with them bothok, but I 'm ok with it...Still scary of the ethos ok, cause can't get my head in how if anything is going to work....But that's for you to do the writer on this Than you for the update and hope to see more soon have a good one !!!!!

I can see his new friend taking one of those nasty bars to 'taste' it and then snatching them all cause they're nasty :P

while i am really enjoying reading this, i do feel like it is moving too slowly. it's ch.6 and pyry doesnt even know its gender. it is good the eithos attempted to provide food for the doc and little touches are occurring. but its not really romantic. on a positive note, it is good that pyry and the eithos are getting to know more about each others species. anything sexual happening between the two should be really interesting. hurry up with the update plz.

I absolutely love your story. I like the pace you are moving at. I cant wait to find out what happens! I just hope his new alien buddy doesnt get hurt too bad by whatever has already scratched him up. Also I wanted to say that I do appreciate your concern about what we all think BUT I really want to encourage you to write it how you want to. All of it. This is your story and you cant make everyone happy so I just really want you to do what you think is best because you have done an amazing job so far. Ofcourse there will be parts people dont like but thats the thrill of it. It puts us on an emotional roller-coaster! In a good way:) soooo having said that...hope to see more soon! Keep up the amazing work!

wolff, thank u for responding to my review / request. its okay that it doesnt fit ur story and i will continue to read to see how u work things out for pyry and the eithos. i really like how intelligent the eithos is and i am hoping that at some point the eithos will take it upon himself to help pyry obtain food. looking forward to ur next update.