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June 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Well, I like your story! EVen if it has a resemblance to the Verlon it seems to go into a different direction. So I am pretty excited to see what's coming next :)
(And to hear that the story is in essence already finished, there are way to many good stories unfinished on here!
(And to hear that the story is in essence already finished, there are way to many good stories unfinished on here!
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June 27, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Really interesting so far. You write very well. The story line is similar to the Verlon but I can tell this is going to be a lot different. It's definitely a story that I will follow. Keep up the good work!
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June 26, 2014 at 12:00 AM
hello
i think your story is good but it likes another story called Verlon" but i hope your story would be better .
i think your story is better and the keeper in your story is more strict and also your story is bdsm
i think your story is good but it likes another story called Verlon" but i hope your story would be better .
i think your story is better and the keeper in your story is more strict and also your story is bdsm
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June 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Good first chapter. Though this does seen very similar to the story "The Verlon" however. The premise and alien father forcing his son to bond is the same, but this chapter does have a bit of a twist compared to the other. I'm looking forward to seeing how this progresses. :)