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October 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
thankyou so much I love this story every chapter is such a good read I cannot wait for the next
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October 4, 2014 at 12:00 AM
First,I have enjoyed reading both GITG and BITG. Considering starting over with the first chapter even since I tend to overlook some things the first time, or skip over sections for various reasons.
That said this was a nice chapter. It had action, maybe a little more would have been nice. It had a small amount of sex that wasn't overly dramatized, nice to know its not all about the sex. It's great to have one or more of these kind of chapters to break it all up. The surprise wedding for Max and Emma, and others, is a nice secondary plot. It branches off nicely from the other story directions. I was expecting a little more of the Jeeves and professor story since they too will be married. There seems to be an absence of a "how did we get here" with them. It was totally out of left field. It was seemingly more a filler than part of the full story. I for one applaud you for it. It gave a little reality feel to the story. After all homosexuality is a part of the real world, and given their life style it had to come into Max and Company's world as well. Having read many, probably to many, sex stories, I don't believe I have seen any other do that. The perhaps they are not homosexual, but bisexual and Amy needs to kiss the professor like she did Jeeves to see. Anyway I digress.
Please take anything said as it is intended, as just an opinion. I have read a few of the reviews and I find there is always someone that thinks they can do better than the author. Sometimes that is the case. I freely admit I couldn't write like this. Like many of the fans I'm sure I could come up with a few ideas, but those would only be based on what you have created. It would be interesting to see what some of the story fans would do if they were writing a chapter or even a scene. where would it lead? Could GITG beat out BITG for number of chapters? Would it open up for the next book? To bad there's not a way to find out. Again I digress, sorry.
Let me end before I go on more. Thanks for the story and looking forward to the next chapters.
That said this was a nice chapter. It had action, maybe a little more would have been nice. It had a small amount of sex that wasn't overly dramatized, nice to know its not all about the sex. It's great to have one or more of these kind of chapters to break it all up. The surprise wedding for Max and Emma, and others, is a nice secondary plot. It branches off nicely from the other story directions. I was expecting a little more of the Jeeves and professor story since they too will be married. There seems to be an absence of a "how did we get here" with them. It was totally out of left field. It was seemingly more a filler than part of the full story. I for one applaud you for it. It gave a little reality feel to the story. After all homosexuality is a part of the real world, and given their life style it had to come into Max and Company's world as well. Having read many, probably to many, sex stories, I don't believe I have seen any other do that. The perhaps they are not homosexual, but bisexual and Amy needs to kiss the professor like she did Jeeves to see. Anyway I digress.
Please take anything said as it is intended, as just an opinion. I have read a few of the reviews and I find there is always someone that thinks they can do better than the author. Sometimes that is the case. I freely admit I couldn't write like this. Like many of the fans I'm sure I could come up with a few ideas, but those would only be based on what you have created. It would be interesting to see what some of the story fans would do if they were writing a chapter or even a scene. where would it lead? Could GITG beat out BITG for number of chapters? Would it open up for the next book? To bad there's not a way to find out. Again I digress, sorry.
Let me end before I go on more. Thanks for the story and looking forward to the next chapters.
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October 2, 2014 at 12:00 AM
OK. Something just does not seem right. Only 3 of them. If Max gets hit in the wrong place his electronics could go haywire. OR the twins might come in and suggest to the 3 that they might want to try them on. That would be awesome. Having their hemorrhoids rearranged with an aluminum bat and by girl (6yr old yet).
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September 29, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Really?? Jeeves and the professor?? Now we are stretching.
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September 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
as usual another brilliant chapter thankyou so much and please keep them comming
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September 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
One question. Didn't they blow the underground site before they left the area??
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September 27, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter. Enjoyed the part of Max getting sick at the birth. Just goes to show everyone that he is human after all and not a machine. Many fathers can not take a live birth without getting sick over it. Like that you are not ending all the chapters with a cliffhanger. The only thing was that you had Rick hugging May instead of Suzy. Was probably a typo. Probably meant Suzy instead of May. But the story is really great. Am looking forward to next chapter.
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September 27, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad chapter. I Like the story, follow it as much as I can. I for one don't have the imagination for writing. Some constructive criticism, I could do without the reiteration of descriptions and who is who. Anyone following your story knows Amy is a blonde younger sister of Emma who is a redhead and Alice is a brunette. If one of them dyes the hair then bring it up.
Think you would have had a better story line with Tess's baby being named after Cat' sister, instead of Cat.
As romantic as it may have been intended, the scene with Alice and Amy where Alice says she will be with Amy forever - kind of makes it sound as if they will all become robots. Guess the machines will dominate the world after all.
Think you would have had a better story line with Tess's baby being named after Cat' sister, instead of Cat.
As romantic as it may have been intended, the scene with Alice and Amy where Alice says she will be with Amy forever - kind of makes it sound as if they will all become robots. Guess the machines will dominate the world after all.
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September 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Gets better and better all the time. Poor Max is going to really enjoy the thrill of seeing a live birth. Cannot wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.
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September 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
what more can I another brilliant chapter you truly are a talented writer it is such a pleasure to read and never disappoints. one thing I would ask though when will we see another chapter of going home many thanks