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I was turned onto your writing by Magusfang, your listed as a favorite. Now after reading this story your one of mine. Your a talented writer and I'm looking forward to reading more. Thank You

A truly brilliant piece of work that I have fallen in love with. The characters are well fleshed out and genuinely likeable/ loveable, the story line is interesting and leaves you wondering (and even worrying which is always the mark of a good fic), what happens next and how the characters will deal with it, and the smut/ erotica is written beautifully and in a very... Enjoyable? Way. I'm definitely looking forward to seeing where this fic is heading in the future (which is why I'm so glad that it's a newer fic and still being updated regularily), you've got some definite support in me. At this point the story has gotten to the point where I'm sure I will definitely re-read it more than once (and likely again soon), I've favourited it for just that reason as well as to follow/ find it more easily. The only thing I'm hoping for in this fic (because I know for a fact just from reading to this point that it's very unlikely that I will be disappointed by it later), is a happy ending for our two beloved girls with each other. They deserve each other and to me it's definitely the note that I want this story to finish on. The whole "Us against the World" (or atleast societies ideals/ bigotry) is also a huge plus for me, I've always preferred/ like stories much more where the two leading characters are solid in their decision to stick by each other to the end, and their love is something that even the world can't compromise, another reason why this fic is such a high standard (to me at least), even if it is my own preference/ love towards a certain type of characters. And the car, love and unwavering support that Karen and Laci (especially Karen so far) have given each other is a truly beautiful thing.

Please keep it the great work!

Best Regards,

Kairae

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Nice, I like the shyness slowly growing into confidence, but never really going away. This innocence and wonder would have been lost if you changed the age, I'm glad you held your ground; editting would have ruined the whole feel of the story.