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for Unbearable

by Rogue

person gita
schedule June 29, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Nice story.I like first POV
schedule May 22, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Okay the premise strong, and the first person POV powerful, but switching back and forth makes my eye twitch. Just my humble opinion, but I think you should stick to the first person, much more powerful.

Thanks for sharing, PW
person Heather
schedule May 22, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I love it!
person rita
schedule May 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
@Allanasha
lol
person Talana
schedule May 17, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I like it so far. About the only issue I have is that it's not ass whole, it's asshole. The first is basically saying 'your ass is complete' while the second is an insult.