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Heya Dee! Yes, it makes much more sense now, explaining that Lance is down for a temporary job. :)

So, Glenn is still an ass and he has it out for Elliot. God knows why. Jealousy?

Ok, on to the next chapter - you're a writing machine now, Dee. Slow down! I can't keep up! lol

Yeah, I definitely like this version better, Dee. :)

I like the name Marc better than...shoot, I forgot the ex-con's name from the original. Emil? I know it started with an "E" and I thought it was French...damn, and I can't go back and look. lol

Anyway...I think Marc's crazy for wanting to go and put his life in danger like that, but it really didn't seem like he had a choice anyway.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter, Dee. :)

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The intensity in these characters is still incredibly strong and one of the many aspects enjoyed in this story. Glenn is still a contemptible character, creating a very strong emotion as always, but a constant pleasure to read.

Name change to one of the main characters was brave, but this change makes him feel far more rugged, more hard-lined then the name Michel covertly implied. The character traits do not appear to have changed, but it is early days yet.

A welcomed update.

Where the hell did I get 'Emil'? lol Michel - now I remember. lol I do like Marc better though. :)

This is moving fast. Wasn't Elliot's father's heart attack much further along in the story? I don't remember if I asked you this in the original, but if Don is so pissed that Elliot left town to make better of himself, then why isn't the father pissed at Lance? I was under the impression in this chapter (and I also remember the original), that Lance lived in the same town or at least pretty close by to Elliot. So why is Don only picking on Elliot? And how selfish is he that as a parent, he doesn't want the best for his child? How selfish is he that he wants his son to stay in the town where he feels uncomfortable and self-conscious. That is pretty selfish.

And now I see Glenn is continuing with his stupid "joke". He's such an ass.

Looking forward to the next chapter, Dee! :)

Heya Dee! :)

You're back! I didn't even know you stopped posting. I know you posted a chapter not too long ago.

Anyway, I'm happy to be reading this from the beginning again. I always loved crime dramas! :) And I noticed you didn't make the first chapter the prologue chapter like in the original.

Ok, on to chapter two. :)

Good to see this story back. It had an intensity that I am looking forward to reading in its entirety.

Thank you for continuing to completion.

It's looking good so far. Good description and it seemed to flow well.