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June 24, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm so it might just be me but I didn't feel like the Sebastian interaction made sense.
It kind of felt like their dynamic jumped from day 1 into week 3.
This is someone who had never met a fae before last night. Even if we assume she's gotten over all of her awestruck-ness, she's a reporter and she has a captive source, seems like she'd either be really awkward or peppering him with questions. And possibly interpreting answers solely based on the exact position of his eyebrows but still. Even ignoring the whole fae thing if a complete stranger was suddenly living in my house there would be a fair amount of small talk before commanding him to put the ice cream away! Or suddenly deciding that he was a complete bastard. Not to mention it feels like you're setting up yet another male love interest (/not really love interest but hot male in close proximity who likes to flirt, and later has his character deepened into being a nice-at-heard but somehow damaged person. Who is still not a real love interest but only seems like he is in order to add tension at appropriate moments) and to be honest, maybe I've just read too much of it recently, but I'm kind of bored of fics where every attractive male shows interest in the leading lady.
So just my (hopefully constructive!) opinion, don't get me wrong I like this fic - it's been in my "check for updates" bookmark folder for quite a while and I'm very happy your writing again
It kind of felt like their dynamic jumped from day 1 into week 3.
This is someone who had never met a fae before last night. Even if we assume she's gotten over all of her awestruck-ness, she's a reporter and she has a captive source, seems like she'd either be really awkward or peppering him with questions. And possibly interpreting answers solely based on the exact position of his eyebrows but still. Even ignoring the whole fae thing if a complete stranger was suddenly living in my house there would be a fair amount of small talk before commanding him to put the ice cream away! Or suddenly deciding that he was a complete bastard. Not to mention it feels like you're setting up yet another male love interest (/not really love interest but hot male in close proximity who likes to flirt, and later has his character deepened into being a nice-at-heard but somehow damaged person. Who is still not a real love interest but only seems like he is in order to add tension at appropriate moments) and to be honest, maybe I've just read too much of it recently, but I'm kind of bored of fics where every attractive male shows interest in the leading lady.
So just my (hopefully constructive!) opinion, don't get me wrong I like this fic - it's been in my "check for updates" bookmark folder for quite a while and I'm very happy your writing again
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June 24, 2015 at 12:00 AM
“You may think me cruel, my treasure, but it is you who make me so.”
Wow that line shocked me. It seemed so incredibly out of place. It would be interesting if you were trying to show the darker side of Titania, balancing that with how she's cast as a 'good' fae who doesn't automatically loathe humans. Given how the fae interact with humans - even shown by the party in this chapter where few/none will leave alive or sane - that darker side must be there.
But I was left unsure whether or not it was intentional.
Wow that line shocked me. It seemed so incredibly out of place. It would be interesting if you were trying to show the darker side of Titania, balancing that with how she's cast as a 'good' fae who doesn't automatically loathe humans. Given how the fae interact with humans - even shown by the party in this chapter where few/none will leave alive or sane - that darker side must be there.
But I was left unsure whether or not it was intentional.
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June 24, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Oh and I don't think I said, but the reason I found that line so dark is that it's the sentiment very often said by abusers to their abusees.
I'm not a bad person, you just make me this way. It's your fault for misbehaving and making me hit you etc.
And it seemed that you were going for Titania being perfectly good and just doing some character building instead
I'm not a bad person, you just make me this way. It's your fault for misbehaving and making me hit you etc.
And it seemed that you were going for Titania being perfectly good and just doing some character building instead
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June 17, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Amazing as always. Pretty excited to see a new player in the game. She seems really sweet so far though. I'm looking forward to hearing more about Shadow Vox. Also really hoping that the prince doesn't change too too much in the human world. His rogue arrogance really grows on a person. All in all, very interesting and I devoured it all slowly like a tub of Ben and Jerry's ice cream.
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June 13, 2015 at 12:00 AM
When will you add more to story? I enjoy reading it
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June 9, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Love this story!! Can't wait for the next chapter! :D
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May 12, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hey! That was so great!I almost creamed mysf when I saw the update.Why is Roma piss ing off dragon boy though? Could it also be maybe Sam and Celina are having an affair? O.o update soon!
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April 6, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Loved it and can't wait for more!
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April 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic writing. I can't wait to see how ShadowVox and the Prince interact in this relationship and where you go with this. Will be waiting for updates.
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April 4, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Love it! Can't wait to read more!