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Nice story! The way it all developed was so natural, so true to the way siblings are so often drawn to exploring one another. Well written and very enjoyable.
Nice. I liked the description and the flow of events.
Please correct your disclaimer.
Your disclaimer doesn't have one of the two parts we need to see. It needs to have a resemblance clause. We suggest this format and wording: Any resemblance to person(s) living or dead is purely coincidental.
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