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OMG I love love LOVE this story! I totally liked the end with the Mother leopard and Father Caimin! I can't wait to see what turns about with Alyssa and what the Mother was hinting at. I love the different relationship dynamics between Alyssa and the different brothers. Can't wait for the next chapter! Do you have an email notification list? Of so, I'd love to get notifications on when your stories are updated!

Oh, I really like this story. Intresting twist in the latest chapter, can't wait to find out what happens next!

Just found this story and I love it. Please keep going!

Aaaaaw!!! Since December!?!?!? Ur sooo meeeeeeeean!!! That's way way WAY 2 long!!! I mist this story so much!!! I thot ud given up!!! Plz PLZ PLZ update again soon!!!

Well look at you making changes and revisions! :) I was hoping you had added another chapter, but I was excited to see what changes you made too. I did not know that you had a blog- but I checked it out and I suppose the review you were talking about was mine? First, I want to say that I hope I wasn't too blunt or offended you. I love your story so I was just saying how I interpreted it to either guide your creativity or give deeper insight. With that being said... While I was relieved you changed the original argument- because I imagined Alyssa as a...tougher character I suppose, I sort of missed Faheem's arrival and threats to the annoying locals lol. However, his appearance now was appropriate and it actually made me want to like him because he stood up for his brother and wants to protect him. I'm rooting for A&A (Amir and Alyssa) not A&A and F (Faheem) lol. But, you know, it works. Plus it was interesting to see a more vulnerable side to Amir and see the demons he wrestles with because of who he is...
The fight scene was pretty quick. But then Amir is pretty bad@ss so what can you expect, right? :) The sex scene... You provided more details, but for some reason I think the original version was more...intimate. I don't know why, again it's my opinion, but I think at times less is more. The "details" I was curious about was really what position they were in because to be honest I had no freaking clue lol. I wasn't sure if the girl was sitting and Amir was doing whatever, or if he had her pressed against a rock- I was just confused. You explained and illustrated that this time- kudos :), but I liked how before it was like...silk. It was very smooth, simple, passionate, and erotic. You don't have to say a lot in order to provide a steamy scene. I'm not saying to change it!! I'm just saying I think you had it right the first time and while a few things could have been improved, you didn't have to revamp the entire thing.
You also changed the ending...crazy how I remember this lol. I kind of prefer the original ending- I thought it was very sweet and meaningful, and provided insight to the real world. We can't control what we look like and it's sad to think even as a "Jungle man" Amir is judged, mocked, and isolated for being different. So I agree with Alyssa, screw them, but the ending now is pretty similar to the original so I guess that doesn't matter, you know?
Again, it is your story and I am happy and proud of you for sticking with it and writing! :) I'm excited for the future chapters- but if you ever need help with editing- like typos or things like that, or even just brainstorming, I truly don't mind and I would love to help you if you need it. Thanks for sharing your story with us and keep writing, and stay encouraged! :)

Sweet! I'm glad that you updated. I'll admit the whole argument/confusion thing that happened was annoying as hell. It seemed a bit forced, like there HAD to be a problem or some type of conflict. I get it, it was explained, but the girl definitely overreacted to me and made a big deal out of nothing. It's like...you can either work off that tension and be with the person you've been wanting to be with, or pout and frown all day because of your random bouts of insecurity :/. Annoying. I felt sorry for Amir... Poor guy.
I honestly hope they don't "share". Amir met her first and "claimed her" I personally don't see a point to it. It's your story and you're a great writer- this is just my opinion. But I loved the chapter. Loved the sex scene. Some parts I thought could've been more descriptive but it was steamy and tasteful, nicely written. Looking forward to the next chapter! :)

Man loved the update , so hot !!! They , to me, are meant to be together.... Can't wait for all 3 to be together !!!!!!!!!!! Didn't like that girl , bi*ch and the other ones with her, hope she doesn't cause problems, but I know they will...Hope to see another update soon, you got me hooked !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Please update soon!! T_T

Sweet!! An update!! :) I honestly am not for the...two guys, one girl combo, but it fits the story. Obviously Alyssa likes Amir, despite her attraction to his brother and I wish she would just pick one. Situations like this tend to get messy typically. But I'm so glad that you updated! :) Excited for the next chapter. How often do you update? Do you have a schedule, or is it pretty much whenever you have time?

I was looking forward to this new chapter and I was not disappointed, thankyou thankyou!!..and FINALLY!!
II love this story so much, can't wait for the next chapter! keep writing :)