rate_review Reviews

I always feel like a bucket of ice water has been thrown over me when I start to read these chapters. I hate reading about the rapes which is good because the way you write, it's like I'm there. When I was reading the car chase scene I got all Kolja's confusion, I was also reading it at a fast pace and I was kinda hoping that Charley got shot and died. It's not the first time I've been disappointed that he survived.

I always get a bit teary eyed when you write a very scared Kolja, the way he always remembers his mother and his sister. I wonder what happened to them and if they're aware what Kolja is going through.

At the end I really thought for a moment Kolja was going to ask Alek for help to get away from Charley.
I still don't know what I feel about Alek not helping Kolja get away. I understand he is stuck too, Charley is very unpredictable and unpredictable people are dangerous but I still scream at him to help the boy.

Happy new year to you,looking forward to an update, I think. :-)

Good chapter. Really want to know how their relationship develops

I am constantly in awe of this story and your amazing writing skills... " even if Alek was watching him like a colossally disinterested hawk...." just a tiny brush of humor, a fantastically descriptive statement, in this twisted, horrifying rape scene, gave it that much more depth. The car chase, with that sweet, damaged boy, desperate to stay alive, and that constant fight for his right to live, no matter how brutal life has been to him, is so harshly matter-of-fact and so sadly emotional. This boy wants freedom, he wants to live, and you've made him the most beautiful, hurt flower in the universe. I love him. You are not just good - I can't say this enough - your writing skill is rare. Send this out to be published! And then keep writing, I truly believe you have that magic to be a classic American author.

This story is wrecking me! How do you write something so soul-destroying in such a beautiful way? Your descriptions weave and knit a world created as though from an aurora borealis. These oh-so painfully real people, crafted from mud and clay, bone and blood, as though by an ancient god. The descriptions are breathtaking - a little boy, sitting naked in front of a window, bleeding, broken, but with a spark in his heart that has yet to be snuffed out. The horrible way he's been treated, for so long, by so many is dreadfully realistic and HURTS to read. He's an abused angel, his wings sullied by others. Yet he is still alive, and young, and curious, and that spark in him calls for, demands, to seek a continuation. And the setting - I probably mentioned in my last review how wonderfully strange the whole premise is - the 70's being interwoven here and there with bellbottoms, mentions of the musicians of the day, the fashion, the orgy of drugs - all in a Viking Las Vegas. I am astounded by this story, honestly. I'd love to see it published. Your work is amazing. It's beautiful. It's wretched. It's magnificent.

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful writing! Such a horrifying, painful thing to read, too. You've created such a vivid, realistic world, based on such a viciously monstrous idea, that reading about your little Gypsy's rapes and tortures makes me feel sick to my stomach. This is not erotica...it's far too real, Kolja's pain and fear much too deeply visceral. (Anais_Wannabe's Noah series - that's some sick erotica, but the twistedly fun, fantasy kind). Not that what you're writing isn't good - it's utterly fucking fantastic! - but it's definitely too realistic to be erotic. Which is good. After reading the Noah stories, and feeling almost a little too perverted for the good of my own mental health, it's nice to know that, when it comes to a serious story of a child being raped, it is nothing but disturbing. I mean, I get in a BAD MOOD when I read some of your chapters! This is just a testament to your skill, btw. Anyway, on to your writing.... I find it hard to believe this is your first story! You should copywrite it immediately! The setting is so strange and fantastical, almost whimsical, and yet the world is harsh and frightening and real to the bone. Your writing style and flow are impeccable, your descriptions beautiful, and your ability to draw readers in is intense. THIS IS NO AMATEUR WRITING HERE! This story is definitely publishable, if anyone would actually touch it, what with the painfully descriptive child-rape and all. You've got massive talent, AND you know your way around grammar and spelling! (sadly, this is very rare). I can't tell you how much I appreciate that you're sharing your amazing talent with us, here, for FREE. Thank you for writing, and updating, and please, whatever you do, don't abandon this story! I need a happy ending for this beautiful, sweet Kolja! Although, since you write so realistically, I'm mostly expecting Gulla to be killed in front of his eyes by Chieftan, Alek to be tortured to death in front of him, and the poor little gypsy to be raped to death by the Chieftan's enemies. God, I hope you don't do that to us! Or to Kolja. Love your casually off-the-cuff poetic descriptions (like Kolja's "No!" escaping him when he was hiding in the cupboard - very pretty depiction of floating sounds, and frightened regret). Your talent SHINES. Keep writing!!!

I stopped reading this for a while so I had a few chapters to catch up on. I am conflicted about this story and Alek in particular. Every time he brings that boy back 'home'. Every time he sits there and watches as Charley's hands wander or when kolja is pimped out it's like he may as well be raping him himself.

Then I think well if he did get Kolja away what would he do with? where would Kolja go and he might end up back on the street again or found by Charley or someone else.

Then I wonder if Alek asked for the boy would he get him? But then it's the same thing, what would Alek do with the boy.
See conflicted.

The story upsets me, especially when we read bits of Kolja's past, I can't help but think about the story after I read it which is why I stopped reading it for a bit, but I do like that it's not all heavy, there are moments in it where Kolja just acts like a kid and it makes me smile or laugh.

I am worried about the next chapter though. I wish I had left it a bit longer before I read it so I could find out what happens.
I really hope Kolja gets away and is somehow reunited with his mother and his sister.

This chapter was nerve-wrecking. I'm so anxious for the next update. Good luck on your finals!

Oh wow, that chapter was really intense. I just honestly sat in front of my pc and was clutching it because those flashbacks of Kolja combined with Alek's actions were unbearable. You're really good in capturing your reader's attention and pulling them into the story, at least on my part :)

You are so descriptive with your writing. I was ready to scream when the pantry door open.

Well, damn what a cliffhanger. I wonder what Alex will do to the boy, in the state he's in. Hope to see the next chapter soon!