rate_review Reviews

Please update soon... This story is awesome.

Very interesting story, I would like to follow this. The paragraphs are a bit hard to read because there are too many lines that are not indented, and not enough separation from one line to the next within a paragraph. I don't think I am saying this right but if you look at other stories, you will probably see what I mean. That said, this is not a critism of your story, just that it would make it easier to read.