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January 5, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ah, so Damon's a stalker! lol
Buchanan Enterprises reminds me of the company of the same name from the soap, "One Life to Live".
Great second chapter, Joan. There were a few typos here and there: shrewed is shrewd, peice is piece, percise is precise, and a few words that you wrote as two words, but they're really one: backseat, boardroom, takeover...
Anyway, I'm really enjoying the story and I look forward to chapter three! :)
Buchanan Enterprises reminds me of the company of the same name from the soap, "One Life to Live".
Great second chapter, Joan. There were a few typos here and there: shrewed is shrewd, peice is piece, percise is precise, and a few words that you wrote as two words, but they're really one: backseat, boardroom, takeover...
Anyway, I'm really enjoying the story and I look forward to chapter three! :)
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January 4, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I like the summary and thought story was going to be Slash so was wondering did you incorrectly code it as Het-Male/Female instead of Slash-Male/Male. If so, you might want to fix that and also could you please fix the spacing in chapter 1 as well so it's easier to read. I will review again once everything is fixed because it's to difficult to read the way it is now. Good luck!