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Aw I wanted to see them kiss. But it was awesome, and so totally cute ;3 Are they going to that carnival next chapter???

I really like this electricity stuff^^ wonder if it i just his crush or something supernatural^^ Thanks for posting and hope to see you soon!!!

It's better now that Richard is more polite with his speech. One thing missed was that he isn't as funny as the the first time but you can always mix that up and add funny parts with him later. I loved it and it seems clearer now and has more direction.

First time reading this story, and I find this really interesting and like the story and characters tremendously. Looking forward to following this.

Truly nice start of the story, I'm looking forward to reading more of it! :)

while i like the new personality for richard this latest chapter made me feel that he seems...'easy'. its hard not to compare the new richard with the old richard. the old richard was fighting aiden tooth and nail while the new richard seems like he's already putty in aiden's hands. (i know its only the third chapter but alot can be said in one chapter). however if the new rich is what you were aiming for then you are doing a good job. i just kinda miss the 'dont give a damn about aiden' personality

Very nicely done. A good introduction to Aiden. Chapter length seemed just right to me. A few spelling mistakes but not enough to detract or even distract from the story. I think you did a great job with Richards reaction to Aiden. Sure Richard is popular, and confident, "a smooth talker" but it makes perfect sense for him to be a bit shy and clumsy. After all this crush is a new feeling and one he has absolutely no experience with. It will be great to see Aiden's reaction to him, especially when they are not surrounded by girls. I definitely like this Richard so far. And well, Brent was awesome to begin with so this version seem spot on.

I love it! I like this version of the story better than the last one.

Keep up the great work! I can;t wait for more!

I really liked the new chapter^^ And I already love Aiden^^ Can't wait for more^^See you again soon^^

I think it's cool that you want to make it better. Good luck ;3