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Oh, and I forget to mention that I bet the men who have disappeared never even left the cruise ship but are still on it possibly deep within it's bowels somewhere where no one can hear their screams.....................................................................

I usually like these stories and it seems like you have a following, so I read the three chapters you posted and sorry to say I will not be continuing. A lot of sentences are awkwardly worded and I had a hard time getting through them. Also, "rape" and "cum" are terrible words to be smashed together when thinking about something like that. If your character in your second chapter was submissive enough to suck the hotel guy's cock, then why didn't he just stay in the first place. The dialogue this is cheaper than the dialogue in a porno. It becomes more apparent in the third chapter. Also, there have been too many new characters and not enough character development or description for me to remember them by. All in all, for a piece with so few grammatical errors and a decent vocabulary, I am disappointedly shocked.

Good Luck.

Why? I enjoyed chapter one and thought we would be learning more about this group of friends with three of them getting abducted and the rest searching for them and eventually finding them by not giving up. I thought Trent, even though he's a major asshole and womanizer, would learn to love Ben after they were both subjected to unnamed horrors Trent would fall for Ben and want to protect him from their abusers. What have you done to it? It's all messed up and I am done. Do something to make this right.

oh hi dears
it was a good chapter but a bit confusing... you know in my mind there were ben and tren and another friend capture by some people maybe even un civilize people and after that would find love with them but know there is mat

i really trust you guys specially you rain because i read all of your stories at least twice and all of them are amazing

i hope this story be one the amazing one too

by the way happy halloween

Happy Belated Halloween! I was busy passing out candy to the kids and it was actually quite a lot of them no candy left for me to munch on today, lol.

Rain, I love your stories and trust where you are going with them but have to admit that I was slightly befuddled by this one. I was looking forward to knowing more about Ben, Trent and their friends but now we have been introduced to Matt. I thought like it seems some of your other readers that the story would be about them getting taken by pirates or something and then finding love. For example, Trent & Ben......

I know you can't re-write what you have already written BUT since you have only posted two chapters please reconsider the direction you are going. I think a lot of people who have started reading this will be as befuddled as me by this surprise. I know I was looking forward to some action with Trent, Ben and his friends with whoever takes them.

Much love and hugs!

dear rain and gothguy
thanks for your explanation ... now everything is clear for me

trent is so rude he called ben fag i hope he would be a bottom and a man shows him it is beautiful i mean love between two men

i hope this story would be different from other slavery stories something new

thank you dear can not wait for more chapter

oh with this chapter you put fuel on my curiosity:))

maybe kirby is not a bartender maybe he works for pirates or for traffickers

can not wait to find out

I am very, very, disappointed in this. Now, Ben is going to turn out to be a bad guy, come on!!!! You had a great start with the first chapter but the rest is going down hill, FAST. Very disappointing. I am really dissatisfied with this new story of yours.

Oh, and what will Ben and Trent's other friends think of Ben if they knew he is planning to get rid of Trent! I am so upset by the path you have gone down.