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Very interesting chapter, he was not a bad guy, I ask myself who had killed him, we will see.....

It is so exciting, I like this story because it has aliens, love and mystery. Thanks for update .

I am thrilled with the way this story is going, I am a fan........!!

Alla is so sweet, is he too old or can Alla becomes pregnant ? Thanks for update.

I love the way you write, please update soon !!!

I really like this story and think it is highly original and I can't wait to find out what happens next. I did se two errors in chapter five that really stood out. The first is grammatical, "Neither Alla nor Mak didn’t talk about it," this is a triple negative, "Neither Alla or Mak would ever talk about it," would work better. The second is just that when describing Aki's disability you said that he wasn't deaf he just couldn't speak and then go on to say he reads lips. If he's not deaf then he can hear what other people say and doesn't need to read lips, he would just need sign language to respond.

Thanks for update!! it was so funny when Jynn was sick. Kairi can be very evil.

I wish Alla wiil find her Happiness with Bahkare. He deserves Love and respect.

Yes, another update . This is such an awesome story, Thanks !!!

Thank you for your work !!!! Does Kairi suspect about Jynn ? That he is Hori ? They will be very surprised when the true comes out.