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for The Verlon

by Payton_Leeroy

schedule October 3, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Plese come back and finish this story!! 

person Anonymous
schedule August 5, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Coming back to finish this story? I miss it so much! 

person Anonymous
schedule June 28, 2016 at 12:00 AM

The story has potential. I like the plot, and the whole premise. It feels a little rushed through the first chapter. I feel like you told us a lot of things that happened when you could have described them to us. With any of the scenes during the first chapter they were over before we could really feel anything about them. It makes us less likely to feel anything towards the main character. Going more in depth with the first chapter will definitely help more people to engage.

 

person HuSTsU
schedule May 14, 2016 at 12:00 AM
I hope you continue to post the rest of story. I will defitnitely buy your book after it published.
person Roya7
schedule December 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!! I just finished chapter 31. :D
Thank you very much for sharing! I really had fun reading it during last 10 days ^^ and I hope you would publish the rest of the story here too. I don't have any issues for buying it as it is really worth it :) I just won't want to wait until it is published which would take what? At least about a year! Ohhh god! Please don't let me wait that long to read the rest of story! I will die! :P lol
Anyway, thanks again, this is a very exciting and interesting book to read and I sure it's going to be a hit when you publish it ;)
person Roya7
schedule November 28, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Just finished chapter 18 ... I think I have started to like Dustin's father a little bit more! The idea for the fight was interesting :D I can't wait to see it would go in next chapter :P

This is a wonderful story ... I just can't stop reading! Alas that the everyday life wouldn't let me to sit don and read it all at once ... ^_^

Anyway, again, THANK YOU xoxo
person Roya7
schedule November 28, 2015 at 12:00 AM
OK, just finished chapter 23 and I should say I am really fond of "Ervous/Jalre" match. Hopefully I am going to see more of these two ^^

and somehow I think the one who leaks the real interview is Dustin's father! :P lol

and who's the one attempting to kill B?? Hmm... No idea at the moment ... I will get back when I read more! :) God, I love weekends! :D I can read with no interruptions! ^_^
schedule November 26, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I'm dying to know who wants Burout dead! Maybe Tysar? But why? I really want to read this story through the end. I'd really like you posting the last few chapters! Pls do.. :)
person Roya7
schedule November 24, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I just finished chapter 10 and 11 and oh my god!!! That was horrible... Poor poor Dustin! He can't relive those horrors again! Hmm ... and I am wondering how Burout can force him to do that so soon again?! What will happen to their relationship? Hmmm... Just wanted to get these feelings out of my system before continuing to chapter 12 :D

Thanks again for sharing this fabulous story of yours! It's fantastic! ^^
person Lavi1443
schedule November 23, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for thr update!
Good luck with publishing the stoty, i hope it will go well.