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for Divided By Zero

by timecap_cell

schedule August 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh Timecap, I LOVE this new story already! :)

But...don't forget the sequel to the awesome story, "Another Side - Book One". (pretty please?) :) Woops! Just remembered that I have to wait until November! lol

Shit, I just noticed that I didn't even See the next chapter to "Part of the Greater Picture". I'll have to get to that now. :)
person Winged_Demoness
schedule August 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
What a great start! I love Clay already. You did a good job of introducing characters and emphasizing their ages as well as their emotions without making then seem childish or flat. Please update soon!
person RckyMntn
schedule August 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Hello!

Just wanted to leave a quick review. I really like this first chapter. I think you did an excellent job of portraying the youth of the characters without making them seem too childish, which can be really annoying. I'm curious to see where this goes! Overall, I think it's a good first chapter that introduces us to the main character's motivations and feelings without throwing it in our face. I know someone who lost his virginity to an older girl at age thirteen and it directly affected his life for a long time, even though it was consensual. He, like your main character, strives for someone just to love him for him.

Anyway, I'm looking forward to the next chapter! I can't wait to see where this goes.
person wolfluv
schedule August 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
WOW what a powerful start! I hope that Clay gets someone that loves him someday! read ya laters!
person RitsuO3O
schedule August 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great first chapter, twas really interesting. I look forward to see where the story will go from here.
person TRUgrit
schedule August 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Aww poor little Clay! Great first chapter! I really liked ur stories w Randy and Preston so I'm excited to read ur newest story. Can't wait for more!
person Ohhhh Heyyy
schedule August 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Omg this story's amazing! Can't wait for more!!!!!
schedule August 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awe poor Clay, please update soon! I can't wait to read what happens next :D
person zas
schedule August 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Love it, i flee sorry for him i hate when ppl want to have sex with u knoqing they don't love u.