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Aww, poor Lonny. But even more, poor E, he's just trying to look out for his brother and has no idea what's really going on! Also, WOW the number of laws Novak is breaking is kinda amazing! Lonny could get him into sooo much trouble if he reported him. Treating a minor like that, man I really hope someone sticks it to him, totally should get his badge taken! Can't wait for more, enjoying this so far, really curious where it's going! ^__^

Good morning Traxie and thanks for updating again so fast! I get so excited when I see a message from you in my inbox that I squeal with joy and ending up sounding like my cat.

What is up with Novak? He's putting Lonny in a very dangerous situation and I don't think Elliot is going to just let it slide when he eventually finds out what the Det. has been having his kid brother do. Now I am very worried that Fizzy and Tony know something's up. Where is Lonny? Will Elliot go to the police and report his brother missing but will the douche bag Det. Novak say, "Oh, don't worry he probably just ran away from home because you were being to strict with him" or something like that.

I am really very angry with Novak right now and be better redeem himself, and soon, or I will dissect him in a very horrible and painful way!

Huggles, Katie.

Novak you dick wad! If anything happens to Lonny because of your stupidity I will kill you! I don't think it's good news for Lonny that Tony and Fizzy snooped through his cell and hope he gets out of it pretty much unscathed but have my doubts.

Man, I am so glad I checked in this afternoon and found this updated. I am confused by Novak's actions towards Lonny and can't understand why he is putting an innocent boy's life in jeopardy. He should lose his badge over this. I wonder how he's going to react to the news that Lonny is missing and it's his fault. What's Elliot going to do when he finds out? So many unanswered questions, but I will wait as this story unfolds. Oh, can I sucker punch that asshole Detective for Lonny's sake?

I wanna know whose bed Lon woke up in!!!!!

I have had such a bad day at work again and when I came home and found out you had updated I was so happy. I am glad tomorrow is Friday.

What is Novak doing to Lonny? Doesn't he know how dangerous these type of criminals can be especially if they think someone in their ranks is a snitch.

If Lonny gets hurt, I am going to knock Novak out and stick his head in a dirty toilet full of poop.

It would deserve Novak right if his boss made him be like a bodyguard to Lonny and Elliot because of all this mess he's getting the kid into.

Dude this story is really cool so here's hoping you keep it up.

Oh my gosh! I hope Elliot will be alright and that nothing bad happens. Where is he? Novak's bed, LOL. Anyway, I seriously want to kick Novak in the balls with how he's treating Elliot. What's Lonny going to do if he's missing? Will he think he ran away? This mess Elliot is in is all Novak's freaking fault!!!!! I hope Tony and Fizzy didn't see any text messages from Novak on Elliot's phone but bet they did and now he's in serious trouble. Naughty cliffhanger Traxie but I love them!

It's midnight where I am and that's my excuse for typing Elliot instead of Lonny and getting their names reversed. I am as tired as Lonny and am hitting the sack before my head hit's my keyboard, LOL.

Poor Lonny. This can't be good.

Novak seems to be testing Lonny's trustworthiness. Unfortunately, he's not been discreet enough. By repeatedly putting Lonny in situations where he has to explain his absences, he's put him at risk.

And just how the heck does Novak expect Lonny to get close to these young criminals if he's not even smoking or drinking? Is Lonny supposed to say, "Oh, no thanks, Fizzy. I'll just have me a nice, refreshing glass of water."

I know Novak didn't forbid him from smoking and drinking in the company of those guys but the way he looks down on Lonny for doing it is wrong. Lonny was forced into that situation by Novak!

Oh, the injustice! XD Loved this chapter, by the way.

I can't wait for the next chapter. It's a bit much to expect but I hope Lonny doesn't get hurt.