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Please update more often. this story moves at a great pace but i almost forget out it because the lack of updating...

did I mention that jaye is the stupidest main character I have ever read?! I hate him sooooo much!!! Gosh, it breaks my heart for kerr... i want to cry while reading this.... i know that they are going to end up together or something but gosh, do I want jaye to suffer!! I want to torture him and beat him up but I know that's not possible... so all I want is for kerr to make sure that jaye would work really really hard, I mean really hard before he forgives him!!

It's about time for them to meet their Dad! Awwwww... Everyone deserves to be happy now. Hopefully you can update soon. The excitement is getting on my nerves. :)

I wonder if Jaye really loved Kerr, because he is always distrustful of him, the people say to him how Kerr is sick, his dragon too and he is so a dick. About his ex-wife he defences her. I would hate that only because he suddenly knows the truth about the kids, he can say I Love you and believe in you. That would be so a hypocrisy. In any case, Thanks for update.

Please update this, I can't wait to see what comes next for this awesome couple.

WOW THIS STORY IS AWESOME EVEN WITH ERRORS! I wonder if his brother is a "HATER" that's why he tried to break them up??? read ya laters!!!

Thanks for update !!!! Jaye is so stubborn, he will suffer when he knows the truth, because he löst 10 years with his children. Will the children know the truth about their father , that Jaye let Kerr so suffer ?

I like your story plot and characterization-wise, but speaking as someone whose first language is also not English, I have been having trouble following your prose. I realize you are aware of some of these difficulties and that you are trying your hardest, but I would suggest trying to focus a little more on editing. A great way to learn more about how English sentences flow is exactly to try to read more and more in this language, until you become comfortable with elements of grammar and syntax. I'm sorry if this offends you in any way, I just felt the need to mention it because there were times when I had to stop reading, go over paragraphs a couple of times, and still only get a vague idea of what you were trying to say.

I want more................, that was a good read, but can u make it a little longer please....................

LOVE IT!!! Been reading this story since it first appeared here, I hope you will write another chapter soon!!!