rate_review Reviews

great chapter it would have been great if lance walked in on them in the kitchen though.

I'm sorry it's taken me so long to get to reviewing the final chapter. I read it right away, but then I went to bed thinking I would get to it later...and later never seemed to be NOW. I loved the entire story. All of it. The characters were great, the story moved at a good but believable pace, and I looked forward to every update. About a Lance/O'Connor story, all I can say is OMG PLEASE! I LOVED Lance, he was sweet and funny, and would love to see more of him! I really hope that you write more, I'd love to read it.

I like it! I like how independent Mark is. Lance is a sweetie. The jury is still out on Jake, though! I mean, grow up why doncha!

You cannot call your main character "the blond," so edit all instances of that out. It's awkward and inappropriate. Use his name instead. It's even okay if you use it more than once in a sentence.

I absolutely liked your story, very fresh, very true, so cute ! I'll search you on FF at once !
Thank you very much.

A french mother,
Bonjour de la France !

Merely Truth

Sorry, I just read the whole thing without reviewing. But it was really good! Nice job on the "All is lost" and "dark night of the soul" moments. How do so many authors miss those? Well, good job! And looking forward to your future works! :)

Thanks for all. i would like a sequel about Lance/Connor.

Thoroughly enjoyed this story! So sad it ended - not to say I didn't like the ending, but I really had fun reading this. ^_^ It made me smile and giggle a lot!

I was going to add this in goodreads, but apparently it's already there:

http://www.goodreads.com/book/show/18337471-now-see-here

I don't agree with those people who said you rushed the ending. Some people just don't know when to finish up a story; they drag it on, and on, and on, and on... I get really annoyed by that. So, I think you did a good job in wrapping up Mark and Jake's fluffy little story in a nice ending.

I did, however, feel that the story of Mark's friend was left hanging, but I don't think it would have been appropriate to deal with Lance here, so I'd love to see a spin-off! I was extreme curious about him and O'Connor, you know; the whole - is he into him or not? Besides, I really liked how their relationship was developing, so I'd love to read more of them, and I don't care if it builds up to either lovers or just teasing friends, I just want to read about them!

That was a very sweet ending. You made something really nice here. I enjoyed the characters and the storyline, great job.