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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
WOW. This is great. I love the character development from a blind perspective. I appreciate the work you did to understand a blind persons perspective for this story. I cannot wait to see what comes next.
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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I loved this chapter... English is not my first language either, but I read enough books and fanfiction to tell you this : You speak a better english than some people born in england or USA... And the story itself is well paced, with no awkward dialogues and with good characters. Also, being myself a woman with no knowledge about blind people, I can only say that I enjoyed this first chapter very much.
Bye,
Bye,
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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh Wow! What a great 1st chapter. Very believable. I like the dynamics between Lance and Mark:-). Can't wait for the next chapter!!!!
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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
hahah xD I had fun reading this :D
seems like an awesome story :P
Will be looking forward to future updates!!
seems like an awesome story :P
Will be looking forward to future updates!!
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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Very nice beginning! It reads very well, and the story looks promising. I especially like how independent Mark is (including work-wise), and it makes a lot of sense to me how his biggest fear is getting lost. Looking forward to next week!!!
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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I like peter Osen. A lot. I would have come to him to tell me I'm a retard toXD
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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
It's really good....
Cant wait for next chapter :D
Cant wait for next chapter :D
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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
The first chapter was awesome, I can't wait for the next chapter.
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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed reading the first chapter and am happy you will be updating weekly, that is so awesome. I think you did a fantastic job nailing Mark being blind and making it realistic. I really love Lance. I can understand why Jake was upset in the Locker Room but shouldn't have jumped the gun so fast and blasting Mark out before knowing the facts. Peter is a jerk but we all have them where we work, LOL. I love Felix too!!! Thanks for sharing and I will read ya next Saturday! Have a nice week.
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June 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really like the first chapter. Cant wait for the updates