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for Jacob and the Snake Charmer

by E.J

person Jensen
schedule August 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh, you mentioned Levi in these too, LOL.

Arturo waved his fork around. Levi recoiled as a small piece of egg hit him in the cheek like shrapnel. "It would have been fine, if the two of you had just fucked the one time, but noooooooo, it had to be not one, not two, but three fucking times!" Arturo screeched. "You don't think I hear it when your headboard hits the wall?!"

"Jesus Arturo, watch where you're waving that thing, I already took a shower once this morning." Levi muttered, wiping at his cheek with his napkin.

schedule August 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I can't believe I haven't read this before!Now I feel like I've been missing something important in life!Time for REDEMPTION!!!*read this super heroic style.On leg on a rock,wind blowing mu cloak,chest jutting out and booming voice.Yes I'm that serious!!!*

What's interesting about this story is that it contains some pretty intense stuff,rape,prostitution,pedophilia,incest,suicide,depression,drug abuse and so on so forth,but despite the intensity of it all,it still manages to stay light.
Caring and gracious drug lords that do charity,crazy,asshole,pretty and caring kidnappers,Spongebob,...To this chapter,16,the only true antagonists in my opinion were that asshole Malcolm ( which reminds me of Mad Aunt Maud and her stuffed stoat.Or was that Sally?...)* and uncle Terry.

Every time,you think something bad is gonna happen,that this is the last trigger,but then "poof!!!" and the fairy godmother is there to save the day!I absolutely love it!

Have you read "Lifelessly"?It's a true story,based on the main character's journals and their friends' memories,written by one of his friends.It should be on this site,on True Stories section.But today,I couldn't find it though I have it saved in my E-book Reader so if you were ever interested I could give you...Anyway,it's a story that has probably all of the things mentioned above and it's completely true.Though sometimes it's so surreal you're not sure to believe or not...Thou I don't recommend it for those with weak hearts.I read it a couple years ago and I went into a mini depression and full on cynicism feat for over a week.And I remember crying myself to sleep on some parts.It really makes people think.And I doubt I'll ever forget it.Your story reminds me a lot about it.

It's refreshing to read a story that has those materials in it but it's also light.I'm rambling.I love all your characters.I specially love the mental image of all of La Familia gathered in a stadium,filling every nook and cranny,and they're all eating dinner and suddenly,Le Abuelo stands up,every one silences,and he faces David and Jacob with a serious face and says:"Child,my wife died because of all the trauma she went through when the family came to visit in every New Year.She just couldn't make enough cookies and eggnogs for all her grandchildren.And there was a time when I almost went bankrupt because I had to buy all those fishing equipment and chocolate and roasted peanut to fill my pockets with to give to you children...You did well child,not giving your father the grieve he gave me...Just remember to wear condom child.You know how life is.Better be safe than sorry I always say...I hear the ribbed ones give the most pleasure.And I have all these toys collection that I'm going to leave for you in your inheritance,since I have no use for them now that your grandmother has passed away...Good luck child."

P.S:*Sorry!You'll only understand this reference only if you've read The Eddie Dickens Trilogy by Philip Ardagh!It's a pretty damn weird and funny book!If you're a fan of mad people and fuckin' weird and silly situations,then you'll love it!!! :)))))
schedule August 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Okay this is my third attempt to post this.

Can't believe it another cliff hanger. I hope Jacob will be okay that poor boy has been through so much already in his life I have no idea how he is functioning. It took some balls to do what he did.
I love how you are developing your characters, Arturo is fast becoming a favourite of mine. I love the way he bounces off everyone.
Can't wait to see what happens next.
person Anon
schedule August 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I am thinking that since Sampson and Levi were at the breakfast table with David, Jacob and the others that what happened at the end of previous chapter hadn't happened yet by that point and the kidnapping took place after Levi and Sampson left David's place but it's kind of confusing.
person Onyx
schedule August 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Well E.J. you certainly know how to make us crave your next update....I cannot tell you enough how much I am enjoying this gem of yours! As much as I look forward to the end of this fabulous story, I am dreading the end of this fabulous story as I will miss it so much, unless you are going to keep giving us captivating work like this?
person wolfluv
schedule August 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I HAVEN'T EVEN FISNISHED THE QUARTER OF THIS CHAPTER AND I'M LAUGHING SO HARD I PEE'D A LIL!!! OMG HEE HEE HAA HAA HEEEEEEE I GOT GO NOW DAMN IT! HEE HEE HEE HAAAA HAAA OOOHHHH IT HURTS! I NEED OXYGEN I CAN'T BREATH! HEE HEE "EGG SHARPNEL" HEE HAAAA HEEE OHHHHH DAMN!
person wolfluv
schedule August 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
ALL RIGHT SISTER you've got a mistake going on... YOU have Levi at the breakfast table I think you ment to put someone else there maybe Brennan? Still haven't finished the chapter yet but wanted to let you know!
person wolfluv
schedule August 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Damn Turo can run like a mother humper! Great cliffy awesome chapter! Read ya laters!!! hee heee haaaa
person meg
schedule August 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Aging not nice to level it there! But i lovr it so much
schedule August 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh no not another cliffhanger! I am glad Levi and the kid are okay though.