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Yes you did very good complinent keep it up . It s a good story and now the spanish is good to. Keep it up

I just left a really nice long review (I am going to learn to copy them from now on) and it disappeared when I clicked the review button. I am very frustrated right now so this one will be short. Yeah, go David go, you are the man!!!! I will be your cheerleader. ~~~ waves pompoms ~~~ I think Emanuel made a grave mistake and he better leave town fast. David's grandfather sounds like a scary fellow. I admire Valeria for having enough moxie to speak up to her father for Jacob's sake. Oh, how did Emanuel get into David's home so easy, wasn't there suppose to be security? I know David wants to find out who let him in but regardless shouldn't there have been other men there too who could have stopped it. Or, where they too afraid of Emanuel and did nothing but will now have to face David's wrath? I know all will be revealed so will wait and find out. I liked my first review better but can't remember it word by word so here you go.

oh my God, i want the next updated fast....btw what the meaning of Pinche Cabron? u still note give me translate.

Thanks for not keeping us waiting too long with that cliffhanger! I really like this darker side of David but wonder would he really kill his own father if it came down to it?! The scene between him and Arturo was sweet. Oh and I would like to see more of Valeria. I hope David doesn't do anything in front of Jacob because it would be too traumatizing to him. Does Jacob resemble Malcolm at all because everyone refers to him as Asian all the time? I hope Emanuel brings Jacob to David or there will be hell to pay and I wonder how far David will take it.

I really feel sorry for Jacob and Levi along with Arturo for having such messed up families especially their father's in which both of which don't give a rats ass about their children. Who is more threatening, David or Salvatore? We know now what David is capable of but what about Sal? I hope Arturo hears back soon from David that Jacob is safe. He must feel so terrible about it even though it wasn't his fault.

I want to know what the heck Emanuel wants with Jacob. He told Arturo that he just wanted to talk with him but then removes him from the sanctuary of David's home and acts like nothing happened even though he beat up both Arturo and Jacob. I don't want David to become his father and he might if he kills him because it will change him from the person he is now. I hope Emanuel is not stupid enough to try and kill Jacob in front of David but if he tries he's definitely a dead man.

YOU BITCH!!! that was the first thought I had as I reached the end of the last page.... I just thought I would shar that with you... Well words I guess cannot discribe... I LOVE IT! read ya laters!

I am really loving this story! I especially enjoyed the interaction between arturo and jacob and I can't wait for levi to accept salvatore completely. As much as I liked your story, I still feel like I have to say that it is painfully obvious you do not speak spanish. I'm mexican american and I would really like to help you out if your willing. here are some suggestions for the spanish prases you put int his chapter.

"Solo me vino a hablar con el niño." could be, "solo vine a hablar con el chico."
"no me habla a mi en tal manera." could be, "No me hablas de esta manera, arturo."
"eres nada pero un chico estupido." could be, "No eres mas que un niño pendejo."
"You lift your fists to me, su padre!" could be, "You lift your fists to me! A tu padre!"
"Quiero matar a usted ahora." could be, "Te voy a matar!"
"Nunca falta de respeto me otra vez." could be, "Jamas vuelva a faltarme el respeto!"

Well, I more the David/Jacob-reader to be honest! But I still kinda enjoyed knowing about Levi! Now, Arturo seems...interesting? Haha, I liked the way he tried to lift Jacob's spirit ... or just to entertain himself with the prank! XD And oh...David's father is such an asshole...Well, looking forward to reading more! :)

Well now . . . I have to say, I loooove David's response. Quick, precise, and hitting his dear father where it seems to hurt the most - the wallet. Although on a less sadistic level, I really wish I had those kinds of decision making skills. I sincerely hope Jacob gets returned with all haste, although it would also be nice for David to get permission to off his old man. Decisions, decisions. Once more, thanks for the great update, and just to let you know, my spanish is more than a little rusty, so you could tell me in spanish that aliens just crawled out of Jacobs ass and I wouldn't be the wiser. Keep up the great work!