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May 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Only thing I found that kind of bugged me was this:
Just thinking back those few days ago left him cold, nauseous and even tenser then he was now as he awaited the Master’s arrival.
"even tenser" would probably better as "more tense"
This is a good start. Looking forward to more!
Just thinking back those few days ago left him cold, nauseous and even tenser then he was now as he awaited the Master’s arrival.
"even tenser" would probably better as "more tense"
This is a good start. Looking forward to more!