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March 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic chapter, Selah! :)
I really love how you have the flashbacks throughout the chapters, but you ooordinate them to coincide with what was going on in the present time. I didn't notice that before this chapter. You flashbacked to when Ian's dad had the stroke, then flashforwarded to the present time at Ian's parents' house, then flashbacked again...and so on. I really like that, and of course I love reading about Will and Ian's past. :)
I laughed hysterically at the whole scene where June and Ben were trying to get the kids and themselves out the door. Omg, what chaos! lol I especially loved when Ben was lifting Laurel up and down, trying to get her tights on like you would put a pillowcase on a pillow. That was funny! :)
I thought Ethan was pretty funny also: "In Ian-land, we called that 'fuck-off'" lol
I can't tell you what a terrific writer you are, Selah. The way you describe things, the way you 'show' and not 'tell' the readers what someone looked like, for instance. When you described Mercedes' face as looking like a crater with her wrinkles (I can't remember the exact words), I could really picture her wrinkles sort of giving way and widening like a crater would. But all your descriptions are so expressive and well, descriptive, for lack of a better word.
I love the story so much, but that's mainly b/c of your wonderful, well-written prose. I can't wait for the next chapter! :)
I really love how you have the flashbacks throughout the chapters, but you ooordinate them to coincide with what was going on in the present time. I didn't notice that before this chapter. You flashbacked to when Ian's dad had the stroke, then flashforwarded to the present time at Ian's parents' house, then flashbacked again...and so on. I really like that, and of course I love reading about Will and Ian's past. :)
I laughed hysterically at the whole scene where June and Ben were trying to get the kids and themselves out the door. Omg, what chaos! lol I especially loved when Ben was lifting Laurel up and down, trying to get her tights on like you would put a pillowcase on a pillow. That was funny! :)
I thought Ethan was pretty funny also: "In Ian-land, we called that 'fuck-off'" lol
I can't tell you what a terrific writer you are, Selah. The way you describe things, the way you 'show' and not 'tell' the readers what someone looked like, for instance. When you described Mercedes' face as looking like a crater with her wrinkles (I can't remember the exact words), I could really picture her wrinkles sort of giving way and widening like a crater would. But all your descriptions are so expressive and well, descriptive, for lack of a better word.
I love the story so much, but that's mainly b/c of your wonderful, well-written prose. I can't wait for the next chapter! :)
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March 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Hello! I've only recently found your story and I felt complelled to tell you how much I love it. It's really well written, even if I do kinda hate Will. You mentioned the last chapter it head really changed for you and I got nervous. Then you wrote the epilogue and mentioned we'd all be happy so I'm feeling better.
I'm still hating on Will a bit. He's been unbelievably horrible to Ian. I love Ian, but I love Christian too. Don't care for Marin though I don't have a real reason. Lol.
This last chapter where Ian finds out about his dad you wrote "June is taking the next flight ...
.", but I think you meant Esme.
Great great story, I'm ready to see Will get the perverbial ass kicking cause Iran us right. He thinks saying I'm sorry fixed things it doesnt fix. I can't wait for the Christopher effect. His that will play into Will's job. So much fun. Thanks for sharing it.
BTW this is only the second review I've ever left on this site having been bouncing around here for about 2 years now, I love this story that much. Its very refreshing and real
I'm still hating on Will a bit. He's been unbelievably horrible to Ian. I love Ian, but I love Christian too. Don't care for Marin though I don't have a real reason. Lol.
This last chapter where Ian finds out about his dad you wrote "June is taking the next flight ...
.", but I think you meant Esme.
Great great story, I'm ready to see Will get the perverbial ass kicking cause Iran us right. He thinks saying I'm sorry fixed things it doesnt fix. I can't wait for the Christopher effect. His that will play into Will's job. So much fun. Thanks for sharing it.
BTW this is only the second review I've ever left on this site having been bouncing around here for about 2 years now, I love this story that much. Its very refreshing and real
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March 20, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Well you've completed a year since you've started this story,congratulations.Thank you for sticking to regular updates and continuing this story.Love love reading flashback's,it's so fun to read when your characters are annoying each other but then these flashback just add fuel to my already burning curiosity to know what happened b/w them.
I really appreciate long chapters they just make the wait all the more worth it:)Looking forward to part 2.
I really appreciate long chapters they just make the wait all the more worth it:)Looking forward to part 2.
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March 20, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I hope you're feeling better by now and your pain has gone away. =)
Chapter eleven: I don't think I read this chapter. Where have I been hiding?
There were so many parts to this chapter that were hysterical! I love Mercedes - she's a pip!
The whole jail scene was entertaining and of course when Ian and Will were stoned was priceless. :)
Hmm, and Marin's old b/f (crush), is there in London. What will she do? lol
Ok, on to the next chapter. :)
Chapter eleven: I don't think I read this chapter. Where have I been hiding?
There were so many parts to this chapter that were hysterical! I love Mercedes - she's a pip!
The whole jail scene was entertaining and of course when Ian and Will were stoned was priceless. :)
Hmm, and Marin's old b/f (crush), is there in London. What will she do? lol
Ok, on to the next chapter. :)
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February 8, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Selah! You're back! Happy New Year! lol Happy Valentine's Day!
So, I had to re-familiarize myself with the story again so I reread the last chapter. It all came back to me and I was laughing so hard at Esme in the playground and June threatening Laurel if she's bad, she's going to get her 'priblegs' (sorry, forgot how Laurel pronounced it!), taken away. And the whole thing with the little boy tied up on the pole, OMG, hysterical!!!
The kids at the T-ball game with Sage Iris telling Laurel and Finn the facts of life practically were great, but nothing beat the strap-on dildo and all the story of Ben and June's friend who had to call 911 b/c his wife's dildo was stuck up his ass! OMG, I was in hysterics!
The only thing that brought down the chapter was Will and June's past and their horrible childhood.
I'm sure when I reviewed the chapter I was going on and on also, so sorry for a repeat! lol
Ok, on to the new chapter! :) I am SO glad you are back, Selah!!!
So, I had to re-familiarize myself with the story again so I reread the last chapter. It all came back to me and I was laughing so hard at Esme in the playground and June threatening Laurel if she's bad, she's going to get her 'priblegs' (sorry, forgot how Laurel pronounced it!), taken away. And the whole thing with the little boy tied up on the pole, OMG, hysterical!!!
The kids at the T-ball game with Sage Iris telling Laurel and Finn the facts of life practically were great, but nothing beat the strap-on dildo and all the story of Ben and June's friend who had to call 911 b/c his wife's dildo was stuck up his ass! OMG, I was in hysterics!
The only thing that brought down the chapter was Will and June's past and their horrible childhood.
I'm sure when I reviewed the chapter I was going on and on also, so sorry for a repeat! lol
Ok, on to the new chapter! :) I am SO glad you are back, Selah!!!
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February 8, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Amazing! as always hehe.
So much has happened and yet so much more is to come.
I really can't wait for more Will and Ian moments. And when they realize their love for one another :D
But I also can't wait for this big talk the two need to have but haven't yet. I hope this happens soonish.
So much has happened and yet so much more is to come.
I really can't wait for more Will and Ian moments. And when they realize their love for one another :D
But I also can't wait for this big talk the two need to have but haven't yet. I hope this happens soonish.
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February 7, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for yet another great chapter Selah!! I was having a very horrible day full of feels and sobbing after i finished reading ai no kusabi vol 8, and oh how happy i am when i check this site and found your update, you really are my savior!!
I totally love the new developement! After a few chapter without significant problem, finally they have to face their past and think about the possible future. Everything has been going smoothly, so it's nice to see them getting rocky there. Oh and i can't wait to read more about Will's true personality, his perceptive, why he sort of abandoned Ian in the past, and oh my have i mentioned that i'm a very big fan of Will and would be more than happy to snatch him if ever he got divorced and cancelled his engagement! I'm soo excited as to what direction this story will take!!!
Lastly i just want to say good luck on your real life, hopefully everything will be smoother and easier for you! And i will be waiting ever so patiently for you to update this like i've always been since the first time you post this story and i will continue to check for update almost daily just like before too, beacuse that's just how much i looove this story<3 and you<3
I'm also very sorry for a not so coherent review, since this is the first time i'm writing this and english is definitely not my first language haha
Have a nice day!!
I totally love the new developement! After a few chapter without significant problem, finally they have to face their past and think about the possible future. Everything has been going smoothly, so it's nice to see them getting rocky there. Oh and i can't wait to read more about Will's true personality, his perceptive, why he sort of abandoned Ian in the past, and oh my have i mentioned that i'm a very big fan of Will and would be more than happy to snatch him if ever he got divorced and cancelled his engagement! I'm soo excited as to what direction this story will take!!!
Lastly i just want to say good luck on your real life, hopefully everything will be smoother and easier for you! And i will be waiting ever so patiently for you to update this like i've always been since the first time you post this story and i will continue to check for update almost daily just like before too, beacuse that's just how much i looove this story<3 and you<3
I'm also very sorry for a not so coherent review, since this is the first time i'm writing this and english is definitely not my first language haha
Have a nice day!!
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February 7, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Oh my God!Your life has so much...excitement in it I don't even know!And the most excitement I get in my life is probably when someone has already graciously washed the tea pot or made cinnamon tea.And probably our Art Studio/show thingie.Which will end in two days anyway.I don't even have teenage drama/angst or a quarter life crisis.What is this!
And your brother!Do I even have to say??!!!
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Anyways!I better go actually *read* the chapter...
And your brother!Do I even have to say??!!!
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Anyways!I better go actually *read* the chapter...
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February 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Wait you don't know how this story will end? I sooo want to have Ian and Will together because they are sooo right for eachother! Like not even in a romantic sense entirely but there's just something on a base level that makes them so right for eachother! Therefore it would be plausible if they do end up just staying BFF so urgh I suppose i would be okay with that but meh they have such good....chemistry or just..,,something so raw and real between them. I understand it doesn't have to manifest into a sexual relationship but they are always going to be in love with eachother. But our boy Will now is definitely sensually attracted to Ian so arghhh haha the tension is so high! Sorry I'm not making much sense but I have come to really love these 2 and can only wonder what you will do!!! Aka I'm a total fan girl for bff into lovers deal haha! ;-)
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February 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
And they didn't even kiss yet agaaain.There was so much of tension b/w them,this built up is making me crazy.Was Ian even going to kiss him,take that chance?
I wish I could see Ian's house but from what I could understand,it must look beautiful.Just incase if you have any pictures related to your story,could you link us to them?.I was wondering how did Ian's mom know when Will's birthday is?and just when i was expecting a confrontation or something happen in the cell..nothing happens again:(this dance is exhausting but ill never get tried of it.There is so much about their past that we don't know about and I'd really like to know what they really want or feel towards each other.Ugh,few answer's but still so many questions,i really hope to read the next update soon.
Happy new year\o/ and best of luck/success with all your work and responsibilities.Lots of love.
I wish I could see Ian's house but from what I could understand,it must look beautiful.Just incase if you have any pictures related to your story,could you link us to them?.I was wondering how did Ian's mom know when Will's birthday is?and just when i was expecting a confrontation or something happen in the cell..nothing happens again:(this dance is exhausting but ill never get tried of it.There is so much about their past that we don't know about and I'd really like to know what they really want or feel towards each other.Ugh,few answer's but still so many questions,i really hope to read the next update soon.
Happy new year\o/ and best of luck/success with all your work and responsibilities.Lots of love.