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I loved it very much. Will was so cruel in the past to Ian, I hope he suffers a little too now. please Update soon !!!!

Glad to see you back!! ;) and oh man seems like real life was being too real to you huh? But I'm glad you've seemed to come out on the ther side it seems. P.s. We just learned about Addison's so it sucks to hear about the diagnosis but glad he's being treated! And also I applaud you for spending more time with your grandmother. It's nice to see a glimpse of how an amazing authors life is and makes it easier for us readers to maybe understand a fraction of how you can write so insightfully because of all the things happening with you personally. Anyways getting back to the story! I love this so much....the way it's written..,it's frank attitude...the real ness and openness of it...idk what to root for because I trust you as an author will lead me to a conclusion I am happy with---if that makes any sense? I'm curious to see where Ian and wills relationship will go...friendship or more or what?... Looking forward to reading this again! ;-) and thanks so much for continuing!!

Hey Selah I hope your doing fine, you haven't updated for a while so it got me worried not for the update of course just about how your doing .Hope you come back soon to let ur readers know tc:)

This is a great story! I hope you're still working on it!

Wohoo for long chapter's...seriously their like treats for your readers to indulge in;). I'm so excited to see Ben's and June's reaction to when they find out that everyone thinks Will is Ian's husband,which is true so i wonder if Will will tell them the whole truth or tell them a lie to cover up.I'm also really curious to see how Christian will react to Ian introducing Will as his spouse to his students,will he be mad,angry,jealous,understanding or suspicious...this is just getting better and better.

So I read your response and was super confused why you were talking about patriarchy-induced homophobia in response to my comment so I just read it again and understand why you did that. Totally my bad. Replace "dude" with "person" - the "thing" was face touching, not dude touching. I was just being cool. Any combination of gender identities in that situation touching another's face would have felt to me equally too intimate. Not in the sexual way - I mean acting the way you acted around someone in the past that you're not sure of your relationship with now. Your hug scene in this chapter was what I was trying to communicate - the "this is what we /did/, but is this what we /do/?" dilemma, but in an earlier, abortive form that comes before the "we're going to do this even if it's awkward at first" form we saw here! Uh. Yea, that. And thank you for not making Will a self-hating queer.

But yea, one of the weird things about trying to review a work in progress is that it's not very easy to give feedback to capable writers because they can play with ideas and words and keep things from ever going too far. The comment I made, given this chapter, doesn't seem particularly relevant anymore. I shouldn't give feedback until the whole work is in one piece! All I want to say is yeskeepgoing! Ah so excited about this story!

Thank you for another chapter of the story. I'm following the development with a lot of interest. I like how your characters are evolving, each changed by this unexpected reunion after many years since their friendship ended. They complete each other, even if they have relatively successful relationships with other people. Their feelings are engaged in a dance, like their feet are. I wonder what will be the trigger for the big change in the dynamics. I'm looking forward to reading more and I am especially curious about the Halloween party and what can happen under the protection of marks.

Waiting is dreadful but u sure made it worthwhile by a beautiful n long chapter*_*. Have I mentioned how much I love your story?well even if i have ill keep reminding you becoz I really do...I'm sure a lot of ppl can connect themselves with this story at some level.The scene where Ian see's his aunt in his dream is totally similar to the dreams i used to have after my best friend died in a car accident and the absence of the person and the sadness that follows after the dream is over,I could totally understand and relate myself with it. It's turning out magnificently as I had predicted from the first chapter...And i would love to read about Will singing once more,it was quite unexpected but the scene had a nice warm touch to it8D.See you soon.

I don't know where to start... Maybe with something like: HOLYMOTHEROFEVERYTHINGHOLY!!! I am SO glad I clicked on this fic! I read through all current chapters and was literally left breathless many times. This story is easy to read, minor typos here and there don't even matter (I'm really picky with grammar. Won't read a story that has many grammar mistakes, not even if it has 200 reviews to 5 chapters). I like the pace of the story, but at the same time I'm afraid that it'll end too soon. Please don't be one of those authors that set a good pace in the beginning but end the story with a disrupting abruptedness! Love the main characters and for once don't hate the female characters (because they actually seem credible and not airheaded, damsels-in-distress). I keep picturing this story as an anime in my head but that's because I love anime. It's been a while since I've read fiction here that has caused me to hold my breath in anticipation and made my chest hurt in sympathy. I'm emotionally invested in this story now: bookmarked it and bookmarked your author's page in hopes of other good future stories. Keep up the good work (and hopefully life gives you a slight break)!

This story is so good. I love how effectively your characters connect with me! Every character you write from I feel so close to. And when I relate personally, as I do so strongly to Will, it's stunningly intense. I feel like I'm constantly reliving that feeling of wanting and not knowing and walking the weird line between comfortable with my heterosexuality and bisexual as well as that awkward desperation of trying to rekindle a close friendship broken by my own cowardice. And if I don't stop myself by the end of this paragraph I'll have projected on to him so many of my issues you won't recognize him at all...

So keep that up!

I really like your pacing as well - slow but not stuttering and then rolling into an avalanche. That's the downfall of so many good starts!

The only thing I think feels off so far is how intimate Will is when he touches Ian. It just seems they should be aborted a half step sooner. Will goes to touch Ian's face at the club and stops, or after the lesson he stops himself before doing a slightly less intimate but more awkward touch. But it's totally possible I'm just projecting my own thoughts again about the intimacy of touching another dude's face. Because that's a thing.

What I'm saying is I love it!