schedule
April 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
OMG pick up the phone Max!!! What a bad time for car karaoke!
schedule
April 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
What a cliffy!!! Great chapter. Totally worked up about David confessing to Max (and just after Max thinks he couldn’t ever part form the blonde!) Please update soon! Racheal...grrrrr! Kinda hope Victor managed to screw her over (after all, it was his friend ‘helping’ them so maybe he managed?) Does Max pay for extra security??
schedule
March 31, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Man that sucks. I remember putting them in the AN was enough. Geez how times have changed.
This chapter might be my favorite chapter but also the one that might make me cry. I thought that he would end up telling him.
And once again, you post so fast that you make Sonic looks silly.
This chapter might be my favorite chapter but also the one that might make me cry. I thought that he would end up telling him.
And once again, you post so fast that you make Sonic looks silly.
schedule
March 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Hey love your story,I hope this time you will get to write past this critical point,cause I can't wait to see what's going to happen between them.It's a really complex story, you did a good job - it's not boring, but it's not too fast-paced either.
Buut I have to patially agree with your last statement,I guess it was important to catch somehow this critical moment when David is trying to contact Max to warn him and you mostly did well, but damn those insertions with "Disclaimer..." were freaking annoying.They really ruin the moment,the tension,you call it.I'm into the story, want to see if Max is going to answer the phone and then bam! Disclaimer...and not just once...Just saying, you could have written those things first,and then on with the story. I know it's just a minor thing, and come to think of it, it's not even related to your writing, but for me really ruined the pleasure of reading.
Buut I have to patially agree with your last statement,I guess it was important to catch somehow this critical moment when David is trying to contact Max to warn him and you mostly did well, but damn those insertions with "Disclaimer..." were freaking annoying.They really ruin the moment,the tension,you call it.I'm into the story, want to see if Max is going to answer the phone and then bam! Disclaimer...and not just once...Just saying, you could have written those things first,and then on with the story. I know it's just a minor thing, and come to think of it, it's not even related to your writing, but for me really ruined the pleasure of reading.
schedule
March 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I still like this story despite the awkward latest chapter. I really like it and its funny.
Dang I was hoping David would fuck them up and stop them among other things. Man too bad things messed up. Is he going to have a new life with Max? Or are they going to move away or something?
I hope those two idiots get what's coming to them at the end though!
Dang I was hoping David would fuck them up and stop them among other things. Man too bad things messed up. Is he going to have a new life with Max? Or are they going to move away or something?
I hope those two idiots get what's coming to them at the end though!
schedule
March 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh no, don't tell me that Rachel will get Max's money and get away like that. You're totally killing me, I hope you will update soon, the waiting is killing me. I also join the reviews about the disclaimers in ch.17, it is very disturbing.
schedule
March 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story i've been following your story before you've had to put it up by a different pen name...and i'm glad you posted almost all of it that was there again quite fast.Now im just waiting to see max's reaction to the whole situation.I hope you do add a new chapter too,THANK YOU.
schedule
March 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
DAMN CLIFFIE!!!!! Omg, what happened with David??????
And thank you for explaining about the disclaimers. I've just always seen it in an A/N at the beginning or the end of a chapter, never in the middle of it, interrupted by a bunch of songs and disclaimers. Oh well, no big deal.
Now everything is new and I CANNOT WAIT until the next chapter! :)
Great job Paige! :)
Oh, and Happy Easter!
And thank you for explaining about the disclaimers. I've just always seen it in an A/N at the beginning or the end of a chapter, never in the middle of it, interrupted by a bunch of songs and disclaimers. Oh well, no big deal.
Now everything is new and I CANNOT WAIT until the next chapter! :)
Great job Paige! :)
Oh, and Happy Easter!
schedule
March 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Heya Paige! Yeah, the guy I'm with is gasp! Homophobic! God only knows what I'm doing with him! He's from Brazil though and according to him, there are NO gay people in Brazil! Haha, he's delusional. So yeah, he does NOT like me reading all this gay porn! lol But as I say to him, better to read this stuff here then to go to a club or something and pick up some guy, right? Anyway.....I'm on the new re-written fourth chapter so far! Can't wait to get to the new stuff. :)
schedule
March 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Hello, I'm a new reader and I love your story! Max is such a nice guy, I can understand why David fell for him. I can't wait to know how Max will find out about this con stuff. Rachel is such a bitch, I hope it will end badly for her =p I've read the new chapters and I can't help but think that Max's friend Eric is the same Eric that David bullied in high school... but it's a little weird that he didn't recognized David from the photo (unless it's just an act...) Well, hopefully, you will update new chapters very soon.