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CH 25
I love when you can make me smile and laugh with in the first few lines, Eowyn relating her family of mutants to a two head fish ~ CLASSIC!
I know some people seem to HATE Court sure he’s an entitled, self-absorbed, little prick but I also think he’s the character that has grown the most (and yes he still has a way to go), before Eowyn would he ever have wanted a girl to want him-no; had he ever thought of someone else-no; made a sandwich for another-no (I know I’m obsessed with that bit but it was a small act that meant a lot); had he ever talked about his feeling-again no.
How does Gabe have the knack of turning up like an unlucky penny? Hearing Eowyn inner dialogue really made me wonder if she’s just attracted to Julian, Gabe and even Court because they are just Butler’s and have this gravitational pull? I really hope it’s more than that especially with Court I like him. I don’t dislike Julian or Gabe but I think Julian needs to work on be a little more fatherly and a little less lechery then there is Gabe to deal with I trust him less than I do any of the others (including Alice & Annabelle) I could go on at length about them but I’ll hold my tongue.
Surely Court will not be pleased with Gabe reading Eowyn’s thoughts just one more thing to make Court feel inadequate.
Good cliffhanger, I hope we learn more about this blackness she falls into.

I had to say this. Another thing I can't stand about Court is how he always says he Eden loves and Annabelle(well Annabelle takes his abuse)but he can't seem to keep his hands to himself. He's say Eden cold,but how can you be warm to someone that has raped you, hit you and say's nasty things about to you and how you grew up.I knows he's been hurt and heartbroken but he's not the only one.And as far as I've read he's never been abused so what gives. Now with the choking her whatever this little trick he's pulled now there is really nothing likable about him to me. I can't with him.

Thank you for two chapters! I was so happy when I saw them! I can't wait to read more. The story is so interesting I can't put it down! It's just driving me crazy and an update just makes my day. I really hope she can use her shooting and hunting skills to defend herself from those who want to bully/hurt her. That's be awesome to read. I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!

Does it matter if all you can right is dark? All I can paint or draw ends up dark. Some times we need an outlet for our darkness and thats ok. Ive been reading since you started this story, im alittle lost at where we are heading but im enjoying the ride so your doing a good job. Remember if your messed up for writing this we are as much or more so because we eagerly await more...so your not,alone. Lol silver lining and all that. Rawr

This is why I don't type at two in the morning....talk about how many mistakes where in that review! Oh well I hope you got the gist...im not an idiot I swear lol. Btw maybe im just wicked but I love that E is turning alittle bad Im just not a fan of goody goodies and I get why she hurts court he hurts her and well she's young. To young to know that sometimes you have to take the hurt to heal the person you love.

I don't think she's cold, but if your bought up with moral's,values and rules and your taken from that and then put in some new place where everything you were grew up being taught is wrong is now the is now the normal now thing, it's hard to just forget what you were grew up being taught. I can't stand Court, he's such a spoiled brat. Really hate how attached Eden is to him. But I really like how she doesn't always give in to him even if she feels sorry for him. Still there is something about Julian and Gabe that you get resist them. And you don't want too. Another great chapter.

I'm only on chapter four, and so far I've really enjoyed how un-rushed the story was...the pacing was great. It wasn't as if Eowhyn had stopped grieving for her grandad, and her reaction to her new family seemed completely realistic...I mean if she does develop some sort of feelings for them, I was sure that it was going to take some time especially considering how revolted she'd been by them. So I guess I was a bit surprised and a little disappointed that it's only been about 2 or 3 days since she's been with them and already she wants to be with Julian, when one chapter ago she was feeling disgusted at the prospect. Her feelings for her father seem a bit premature in my opinion.

Her grandad mentioned in her dream that she wouldn't be "broken" almost like some sort of foreshadowing that this journey would be somehow hard for Eowhyn, but with her barely knowing Julian and already okay with the idea of sleeping with him, it's hard to believe that she'll have to worry about be "broken" since it seems like she'll be going willingly..just sayin. Hopefully the rest of this tale won't be as rushed as it has been thus far :/

At this point, I'm jut going to chalk up the inconsistencies in this story to the fact that Eowhyn is young. I mean she's already falling for Court but all of his actions towards her and her reactions to his actions speak to the contrary of love. I'm not even sure if pacing is the only issue, so much the fact that Eowhyn's actions and feelings keep contradicting themselves...it just seems like there is a rush to have her love them.

Despite the obvious issues, I'm curious to see where this story is going...you've webbed together quite an interesting world: sinister, dark, and mysterious (always a great combo).

Not gonna lie, out of all of the characters in this story I find myself sympathizing with Annabelle and drawn to Gabriel. I mean Annabelle is a wrench, no doubt, but she's in the same place that Court was in when he loved Lilly, and where Lilly was when she loved Gabriel, and probably where Eowhyn might end up with Court if she isn't careful. It's all quite a sad cycle and having her be so pitiful after having her powers taken, I couldn't help but to see her for what she is - a girl who just wanted to be loved. Honestly, I don't understand how it's okay to discard Annabelle, yet prevent Gab from going near her..but while I usually detest Court, I can say that him showing that he wanted to comfort Annabelle showed me that maybe he might have a soul after all,lol.

I hope to see more of Gabriel...and I like how you've woven the supernatural element to the story without overdoing it; it seems very natural, almost like it was in the story from the start.

CH 24

I liked that the Eowyn's country speak came out more pronounced her being so upset it's natural she would return to her native voice. I suspected a few chapters ago that Eowyn was feeling trapped and controlled by The Butlers but hearing her talk about her past life she was a young girl taking care of her family by cooking, cleaning and providing food.
Julian & Court spying on Eowyn shooting her Revolver show a lot about them all; Court's jealously came out but not jealousy from Julian but how Eowyn was so self sufficient at barely 14 and he as at 17 year old does nothing for himself and his comment "Well you can't drive" was the prefect childish thing to say. And instead of lashing back Eowyn sweetly said "you can teach me". What a flip Eowyn having to explain life to Court. Julian the father made a return warning Court on his manners and confessing to the purchase of her home for her. I'm glad Court admitted to feeling inadequate to Eowyn they might have a shot at being a couple if they talked more often.
I forgot to mention how surreal it was as Julian and Court came to whisk Eowyn back to "civilization", it is so easy to forget they are father and son because they are more like acquaintance who are vying for the same object of affection.

I was so happy to see all the new reviews & reviewers you have! It's nice to know I'm not the only one who thinks your full of awesomeness.