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April 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
CH 32:
Is it bad of me to want Court to be more upset over the baby than over Eowyn; yes her stating she could have his baby most likely brought on this tirade but he is till grieving over the death of his child. I felt sick as I read "I didn’t hear them coming isn’t that funny?They surrounded me", nothing good could come from those thoughts. At least the Butler powers/curse came in handy for Eowyn being able to call Court and have him rescue her (along w/ Gabriel-The Great White Hope) and not on a steed but floating no less.
It all makes sense now I was always suspicious the Gabe went after these particular girls because of his obsession with Court but I thought it was more of a pissing contest type thing but when in actuality Gabe couldn't have Court so he took the next best thing girls coveted by Court (Lily Anne, Serena, Annabelle & Eowyn). It all so makes perfect sense flashing back in my mind to when Gabe & Eowyn went to Caleb's he was definitely into Gabe (possibly not one sidedly) then there was something said about Court and Eowyn assumed it was directed towards her when in fact it was directed to Gabe (or maybe both?). Gabriel Butler is gay and in love with Court! Now after Courts comments were they once lovers or did Court just know about a crush Gabe had on him?
This may seem like an odd line to pick out but I really liked it: “Can I borrow some cash?”, it reminded me of how young Court really is and he was fun and playful. Then that passionate sex filled scene it was H-O-T, and it was placed at the perfect time. Them coming together sexually after such dramatic events; the death of Court's infant and the near-rape do Eowyn. Now I know after such dark events it may seem unrealistic for two people to start fucking but I think sex reminds us the we are alive! I did not expect Eowyns confession bout not being in love with Court and I certainly didn't except to tell him, then not only did he not fly off the handle but he agreed with her, look at my boy evolving before our eyes.
Is it bad of me to want Court to be more upset over the baby than over Eowyn; yes her stating she could have his baby most likely brought on this tirade but he is till grieving over the death of his child. I felt sick as I read "I didn’t hear them coming isn’t that funny?They surrounded me", nothing good could come from those thoughts. At least the Butler powers/curse came in handy for Eowyn being able to call Court and have him rescue her (along w/ Gabriel-The Great White Hope) and not on a steed but floating no less.
It all makes sense now I was always suspicious the Gabe went after these particular girls because of his obsession with Court but I thought it was more of a pissing contest type thing but when in actuality Gabe couldn't have Court so he took the next best thing girls coveted by Court (Lily Anne, Serena, Annabelle & Eowyn). It all so makes perfect sense flashing back in my mind to when Gabe & Eowyn went to Caleb's he was definitely into Gabe (possibly not one sidedly) then there was something said about Court and Eowyn assumed it was directed towards her when in fact it was directed to Gabe (or maybe both?). Gabriel Butler is gay and in love with Court! Now after Courts comments were they once lovers or did Court just know about a crush Gabe had on him?
This may seem like an odd line to pick out but I really liked it: “Can I borrow some cash?”, it reminded me of how young Court really is and he was fun and playful. Then that passionate sex filled scene it was H-O-T, and it was placed at the perfect time. Them coming together sexually after such dramatic events; the death of Court's infant and the near-rape do Eowyn. Now I know after such dark events it may seem unrealistic for two people to start fucking but I think sex reminds us the we are alive! I did not expect Eowyns confession bout not being in love with Court and I certainly didn't except to tell him, then not only did he not fly off the handle but he agreed with her, look at my boy evolving before our eyes.
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April 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry but this story seems to have lost it's purpose. I guess what I'm trying to articulate here, is that this story has become a bit stagnant - as in not really moving anywhere. I mean, hearing Eowhyn flip-flop between loving her new life and hating it has become a bit redundant, as well as her off again on again relationship with Court. Even the hardships that Eowhyn faces are becoming a bit contrived...so now The Eye is coming after the half-breeds...it isn't like this is the first (or even the second time) that someone has come after Eowhyn for being a half-breed and at this point it's pretty clear that she's got powerful people backing her and she's going to always come out victorious.
Everything is just becoming a bit predictable. I know this was meant to be a case study of Eowhyn but at this point I'm not sure there's anything left to be discovered about her...she's pretty much made up her mind about who she is and what she wants. Idk, maybe it's time to focus on some of the other dynamics in the story: like the Gabriel/Court tension or the dynamic b/w Court,Julian, & Eowhyn (it did seem like Court was a bit jealous of Eowhyn when it came to Julian) or maybe even the dynamic b/w Annabelle and Gabriel (since Court didn't seem to want Gabriel to pursue Annabelle).
I'm no expert and I really don't mean to offend but as a fan of this story, I'd be doing you a disservice if I didn't share my honest opinions and try to offer you some of my insight.
Everything is just becoming a bit predictable. I know this was meant to be a case study of Eowhyn but at this point I'm not sure there's anything left to be discovered about her...she's pretty much made up her mind about who she is and what she wants. Idk, maybe it's time to focus on some of the other dynamics in the story: like the Gabriel/Court tension or the dynamic b/w Court,Julian, & Eowhyn (it did seem like Court was a bit jealous of Eowhyn when it came to Julian) or maybe even the dynamic b/w Annabelle and Gabriel (since Court didn't seem to want Gabriel to pursue Annabelle).
I'm no expert and I really don't mean to offend but as a fan of this story, I'd be doing you a disservice if I didn't share my honest opinions and try to offer you some of my insight.
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April 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I feel like a spoiled little princess with all of your updates.
I hope this story never ends.
*goes back to lurking corner*
I hope this story never ends.
*goes back to lurking corner*
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April 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
LOVE this story, hope you continue soon!
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April 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
CH 31:
Reading the beginning of this chapter something different struck me, I always thought of Annabelle as slightly psychotic in her obsession of Court but in reading her reaction about Court needing to “do it alone” made me realize she truly loves him. When Court spat “it’s most likely not mine, she’s a slut”, I really think he was saying it more to convince himself than anyone else. You did it you made me tear up, the passion and pain as Court confessed his feelings, he may be a selfish-fucked-up-brat but he also fell in love with a baby he didn’t ever really get to have. I do wish Eowyn reached out more to Court but I understand she is trying and she didn’t dismiss or ignore him, like she said this is all so foreign to her but her comment “it’s beautiful is what it is”, God Damn that was gut wrenching she meant it for Court but it also made me think about her own mother and how her Granddad always loved her no matter what.
Court saying “she was mine”, brought to mind all those foolish young girls who want a baby because it will love me. It was a very selfish statement but I also believe he would have given her everything he had to give, all the love his mother never gave him, the Sun and the Moon would have hung in her eyes.
Having Court go off and spill his father’s true work to Eowyn was riveting. Eowyn explaining why Court took the beating and him being afraid of being banished was probably a part of it but in some way I feel like Court took the beating to feel anything besides the emotional anguish he was is, the physical pain could take him away if only for a brief time.
Bravo Eowyn you grew the stones to finally spoke up and told Court what you wanted and he needed it. This coupling was different from the other times, granted the first two were taken from Eowyn but the third was heated but this seems something more, I don’t know if Court is capable of making-love but if he is this certainly was. It’s about time Court starts thinking about birth control he’s fucked her four times and had at least one accidental baby. Poor silly Eowyn I know she thought she was saying the right thing offering to give him a baby and she may have meant it but Court being in such a black place only saw the negative in her offer. Pride is a tricky thing I think Eowyn needs to be a little less prideful and say what she thinks and wants more often, good things are worth fighting for.
I have to add I was disappointed but also thrilled when Eowyn went to Courts room and he sought comfort in her arms and then of course I loved the sex that followed but I was afraid that they would all be happy and what’s the fun in that (I know you are so far from conventional and HEA aren’t what you strive for but I still feared that is was the beginning of the end). So in a way I’m pleased there was another misunderstanding.
Before you fall asleep through this long winded review I just wanted to say how dear it was and how much it touched me that you would even consider adding my name to anything you wrote. You’re a special soul and more readers should be lucky to love your work half as much as I do. Okay I’m done… I think.
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Reading the beginning of this chapter something different struck me, I always thought of Annabelle as slightly psychotic in her obsession of Court but in reading her reaction about Court needing to “do it alone” made me realize she truly loves him. When Court spat “it’s most likely not mine, she’s a slut”, I really think he was saying it more to convince himself than anyone else. You did it you made me tear up, the passion and pain as Court confessed his feelings, he may be a selfish-fucked-up-brat but he also fell in love with a baby he didn’t ever really get to have. I do wish Eowyn reached out more to Court but I understand she is trying and she didn’t dismiss or ignore him, like she said this is all so foreign to her but her comment “it’s beautiful is what it is”, God Damn that was gut wrenching she meant it for Court but it also made me think about her own mother and how her Granddad always loved her no matter what.
Court saying “she was mine”, brought to mind all those foolish young girls who want a baby because it will love me. It was a very selfish statement but I also believe he would have given her everything he had to give, all the love his mother never gave him, the Sun and the Moon would have hung in her eyes.
Having Court go off and spill his father’s true work to Eowyn was riveting. Eowyn explaining why Court took the beating and him being afraid of being banished was probably a part of it but in some way I feel like Court took the beating to feel anything besides the emotional anguish he was is, the physical pain could take him away if only for a brief time.
Bravo Eowyn you grew the stones to finally spoke up and told Court what you wanted and he needed it. This coupling was different from the other times, granted the first two were taken from Eowyn but the third was heated but this seems something more, I don’t know if Court is capable of making-love but if he is this certainly was. It’s about time Court starts thinking about birth control he’s fucked her four times and had at least one accidental baby. Poor silly Eowyn I know she thought she was saying the right thing offering to give him a baby and she may have meant it but Court being in such a black place only saw the negative in her offer. Pride is a tricky thing I think Eowyn needs to be a little less prideful and say what she thinks and wants more often, good things are worth fighting for.
I have to add I was disappointed but also thrilled when Eowyn went to Courts room and he sought comfort in her arms and then of course I loved the sex that followed but I was afraid that they would all be happy and what’s the fun in that (I know you are so far from conventional and HEA aren’t what you strive for but I still feared that is was the beginning of the end). So in a way I’m pleased there was another misunderstanding.
Before you fall asleep through this long winded review I just wanted to say how dear it was and how much it touched me that you would even consider adding my name to anything you wrote. You’re a special soul and more readers should be lucky to love your work half as much as I do. Okay I’m done… I think.
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April 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I feel bad she doesn't know how to show what she is feeling. Her brother and father need to help her in this area. Or not it is what maked her what she is.
Linda
Linda
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April 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I have been reading your story from the beginning but I usually do not write reviews unless I feel like a good story is starting to become crappy.
Everyone likes to leave you these reviews like oh you're so wonderful, this is a great story, but no writer has ever improved by only getting their ego stroked.
Recently the story has become really annoying and each chapter feels disjointed. Seriously I feel like when I read your story now like I am going mental it is not making sense. To shorten this it seems like every character in the story is bipolar or has serious mood swings. The personality traits you portrayed them to have in the begging of the story does not align with how the characters react in recent chapters.
One of the most annoying things is an Ewoyns relationship with Court . First please make up your mind about whether you want Court and Ewoyn together. I feel like in every recent chapter they finally make up and then Court calls her a cold hearted bitch etc and tells her to go away.
Wtf and then it seems unrealistic that Court wouldn't have killed the baby or idk it just seems like in the beginning of the story he was cool, badass,evil in some respects and now he seems like a bipolar whiny bitch like his emotions are so irritating he seriously needs to borrow some of Garbriels drugs.
(Makes me sad to say since the court is my favorite character)
The story just really needs to progress at this point in time it seems like the never-ending story. You take us one place and then we revolve around right back to where we started.
Examples:
the millionth time ewoyn and court fight, ewoyn wants court to read her diary,
She can't handle things, Annabelle is pinning for court etc.
Not to sound weird but I have read so awesome sex scenes and yours are lacking it never has enough detail not even at the times when the sex is consensual. This is adultfanfiction people want good stories and awesome sex scenes.
Everyone likes to leave you these reviews like oh you're so wonderful, this is a great story, but no writer has ever improved by only getting their ego stroked.
Recently the story has become really annoying and each chapter feels disjointed. Seriously I feel like when I read your story now like I am going mental it is not making sense. To shorten this it seems like every character in the story is bipolar or has serious mood swings. The personality traits you portrayed them to have in the begging of the story does not align with how the characters react in recent chapters.
One of the most annoying things is an Ewoyns relationship with Court . First please make up your mind about whether you want Court and Ewoyn together. I feel like in every recent chapter they finally make up and then Court calls her a cold hearted bitch etc and tells her to go away.
Wtf and then it seems unrealistic that Court wouldn't have killed the baby or idk it just seems like in the beginning of the story he was cool, badass,evil in some respects and now he seems like a bipolar whiny bitch like his emotions are so irritating he seriously needs to borrow some of Garbriels drugs.
(Makes me sad to say since the court is my favorite character)
The story just really needs to progress at this point in time it seems like the never-ending story. You take us one place and then we revolve around right back to where we started.
Examples:
the millionth time ewoyn and court fight, ewoyn wants court to read her diary,
She can't handle things, Annabelle is pinning for court etc.
Not to sound weird but I have read so awesome sex scenes and yours are lacking it never has enough detail not even at the times when the sex is consensual. This is adultfanfiction people want good stories and awesome sex scenes.
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April 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
There's no such this as too many updates for this story! I check for updates a few times a day already, and I've been loving the frequent postings. Eden is a great protagonist, and she gets to me in a very visceral way. I'm definitely hooked on her unfolding life story. I'm curious as to what other powers she may possess, and what that may mean for her standing in the family. And I'm rooting for her every chapter- whether she's fighting with the family, the townies, or herself. I hope in the process of learning who and what she is, she'll be able to find a balance of her light and dark sides, and not let the darkness rule, like so many of her Butler kinfolk. She seems to be a catalyst for change, and I'd love to see her shake them up but good, especially after how they've treated her. Taking her earliest memories was just cruel for cruelty's sake, which I cannot abide. Anyway I'll quit rambling, just wanted to say its fine with me if you wanna update more than once a day. ;o)
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April 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
To whom may remain anonymous,
I can remember the last time I wholeheartedly disagreed with someone so very much. That being said I do agree with one thing you said an author cannot grow if their ego is constantly being stroked now I don't know what reviews you've read because Eden has ha it share I reviews in which people were unhappy with the writing and the style.
You speak of "disjointed" story telling and "bipolar" characters where as I see them as flawed people trying to figure out a path in this world. And the on again/off again relationship of Court & Eowyn a hello have you ever watched a TV show in your life? Friends one of the most popular shows in history had Rachel & Ross on/off through 10 seasons and people ate it up with a spoon and that I but one example off the too of my head.
The most insulting part of your "review" was to say that this story is on Adult FanFiction and needs to be more sex, so in your eyes the only adult thing is sex? A book/movie/TV show can be considered adult by language and doing of drugs not just two people FUCKING! Of course you have a right to your opinion it's America, everyone has a right to voice their opinion no matter how wrong it is. And here I am voicing mine but the main difference is I'm signing it.
~Mare
I can remember the last time I wholeheartedly disagreed with someone so very much. That being said I do agree with one thing you said an author cannot grow if their ego is constantly being stroked now I don't know what reviews you've read because Eden has ha it share I reviews in which people were unhappy with the writing and the style.
You speak of "disjointed" story telling and "bipolar" characters where as I see them as flawed people trying to figure out a path in this world. And the on again/off again relationship of Court & Eowyn a hello have you ever watched a TV show in your life? Friends one of the most popular shows in history had Rachel & Ross on/off through 10 seasons and people ate it up with a spoon and that I but one example off the too of my head.
The most insulting part of your "review" was to say that this story is on Adult FanFiction and needs to be more sex, so in your eyes the only adult thing is sex? A book/movie/TV show can be considered adult by language and doing of drugs not just two people FUCKING! Of course you have a right to your opinion it's America, everyone has a right to voice their opinion no matter how wrong it is. And here I am voicing mine but the main difference is I'm signing it.
~Mare
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April 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really feel bad for Eowyn, because first she had the responsibility of taking care of her grandparents since a young age, second She is really a sweet young girl who needs someone to be loving with her, not like Court who says may be he loves her because she looks like Josephine, and is always doing hurtful things to her and says she is guilty of things that are not true.
I hope she gets over Court and finds someone who will love her like she deserves.
I hope she gets over Court and finds someone who will love her like she deserves.